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  1. Heartfelt

    Heartfelt Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm not sure what I did to deserve the type of treatment that I am currently receiving
    But it was faith in her love and our future that had me believing
    That we would be together until the end of time
    I think I've concluded that her love was never truly or wholly mine

    I've called her cell phone day and night since I last spoke to her
    And every time I called and she didn't answer
    I wondered what events happened to occur
    She said she loved me and wanted to be with me
    But her absence from me has caused internal insanity

    In October, I wrote a poem for her called "You" and now it's going to be published
    And her avoiding me and not even bothering to answer my phone calls is some bull ish
    If I had a choice now I would start my life over again
    And make sure that on August 26, 2002 I didn't meet her and eventually let her in

    I wonder if she's really doing this to hurt me
    Or is she getting herself together so that we can both be
    Happy and in a state of bliss?
    If there was only one thing I could have from her I would like for it to be a kiss
    A kiss that says "I love you, but I can't be with you, so Goodbye"
    I hope with this my heart will no longer render pain
    But for my hurt, I am really the only one to blame

    I remember one day she said I make her feel good even though we weren't together
    But I didn't know then that being with her would turn into never..
    Seeing her pretty brown eyes once again in my sight
    I'm trying to stay positive, but my emotions are enabling me to put up a fight
    With all the negative comments I've heard and obviously been subject to
    But for her there isn't anything I wouldn't, or at least try, to do

    I want to stay with her for as long as she will let me
    But I don't want to be away from her and have my life be empty
    Of the love that she once provided
    Even my friends know, so the way I feel for her I can't hide it
    I've often heard that if you pray, God will hear and answer it
    I haven't seen a sign yet and I'm having a fit

    If patience is a virtue, then I must have mastered that test
    But when you wait so long and do everything you can do, what is there for you to do next?



    Written: July 9 & 10, 2003
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was very emotive...
    lots of questions to love presented here
    when love calls....there's no escape
     
  3. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We suffer for our art and through our art we are healed!

    Good to see genuine emotion on the page, a lil loosly structured, but it makes the chaos that the subject is feeling more real, you sense the conflict of unrequited love and the unanswered questions...**** you got me craving to know what happens next myself like a good soap opera!
    Blessings On your House!
     
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    dang girl, I can really hear you in this one. I really like it, although it makes me feel alittle sad. But ur expressin urself and thats what I love the most. Ur on a roll, keep them comin...
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

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    i felt this very emotional...
    love is deep....
     
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    yeah, love is jacked up like that...leave you all messed up in the head and emotionally unstable...love can make you emotionally unstable...but you will ride this through.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    it works in ways we just can't understand but feel it
    tyte
     
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