Black Poetry : untitled/unfinished

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by brasco901, May 28, 2004.

  1. brasco901

    brasco901 New Member MEMBER

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    If I were in your vecinity I'd grab onto your essence.
    I would bathe in your warmth.
    I would cleanse my mind with your thoughts.
    I would gather your inner most desires and put myself in the middle.
    I would hold on to your heartbeat and let the rhythm soothe me.
    I would get lost within the gaze of your eyes.
    I would hold on to that moment until time never ever moves.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was short and sweet...I like the way you flowed this...keep it comming, and welcome to the set.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You captured a sweet moment of thoughts...You could add more, but even without, it radiates a gentle yearning.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very nicely done continue
     
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    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ooooooooohhhhh yessssss, this was definitely a tyte joint.
     
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