Black Poetry : Untitled (Scroll #2)

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  1. PlayWitItPimp05

    PlayWitItPimp05 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The same day I realized that you were my soulmate
    You sent me subliminal meages that seemed to warp me
    You took me up into your arms
    And slowly but steadily dropped your charms
    Right at my front gate for me to have forever
    Because things changed whenever I was graced with your presence
    The sky seemed to drip grotesquely and melt into the trees
    Insects hummed all the more loudly
    And nothing seemed more imperfect than the world
    When I was with you
    We would watch nature become our television
    After mad love-making sessions
    I mean we could settle for nothing but simple suttleness
    When I was with you
    Because of the drunk love you created in me
    You spiked my punch everytime you would kiss my whole body
    Before diving into the wilderness and swimming in its pool
    When I was with you
    You made me drunk because of your uncanny ability
    To come even when I was the one masturbating
    Because you felt me just that much
    and we would both suck my fingers afterward
    When I was with you
    You made me addicted to the way you called my name
    letting it roll off your tongue slowly and as gentle as waves
    But in my head it created a sweet symphony
    When I was with you
    Your body would weave lovereams inside my head
    Every curve, every inch of your phantasmic wonderland
    mesmerized me
    When I was with you
    And even when you robbed me of your presence
    I could feel your spiritual hand stroke my psyche at night
    Because its the only thing that brought me peace
    My body had become addicted to
    And now I write this in thought of you....
    Leaving a sad memoir on this distorted piece of humanity
    that you once made me blind and immune to.

    :heart: :heart: PLAY :heart: :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    now dat's love sugar love at that
    love the flip of this piece flow on speak
     
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    very well done...
    love it be love it is
    thas some love
    nice one here

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    this transformed from love, to fire, to passion to reminiscing...
    truly heartfelt...love the ending

    Be sure to pay the love forward...to another poet :heart:
    Much love,
    Sage
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    the recurring "when I was with you"...played with
    my emotions..letting me know you were in some sad place..and yet
    the memories, heated, kept me warm..
    keep flowing...
     
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    A memory that embraces the soul, taking one back to what used to be, a melancholy love. Warmly flowed.
     
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    Whoa, incredible drop. So nice to see you on the page again.
     
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