Black Poetry : Untitled (Ready, Set, GO!!!)

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  1. DymePlaya2g

    DymePlaya2g Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    im afraid to be alone with my thoughts because my thougths rain...
    my thoughts thunder
    and my thoughts produce and enduce LIGHTNING...
    and are fighting
    and my ****** THOUGHTS
    scream at me
    to do what the **** i feel
    and to stop running
    or wanting to run
    or thinking that i should run
    because it's what runners do
    and i
    was blessed with the vehicle
    in which to do it...
    but only my mind runs...
    because right now
    my legs are being sensible
    and providing reason for the unreasonable
    and being that they're
    on the outside lookin in
    or on the outside making clear assumptions
    based on previous actions...
    trial and error...
    it's that i sit...
    think ***** think...
    dont quit...
    dont make excuses and call them reasons and ****...and dont be so afraid to be known like you know yourself...**** IT!!! breathe...DAVID...breathe...resting and relaxing in a space I create...sippin' lemonade...waiting for you.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt as i feel u express your self
    but unfortunately this piece display words on our Banned List
    and see our Fourm Rules for the Banned list words we ask that
    you at your convenience edit these words from your post above
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    nice with the word play and urgency of the piece much respect j.
     
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    DymePlaya2g Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $$RICH$$ - DONE! and my sincerest apologies to the forum...it's been so long that I wasn't aware of the changes.

    Jazz4u~ This piece was urgent like a MF...wrote it in about 1min flat after a major turning point in my current "dating experience." Thanks for reading me.

    Love&Respect
    DP2G
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    all good ,,,,,Thankz we have so many looker now
    this piece was off da hook too
     
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    I was really really feelin this piece. Could relate it to something going on in my life right now.

    Much Love...Alize

    P.S. Sometimes I think that some of our greatest work comes out in a time period like that. (1 minute). I've written some of my best stuff just off the top of my head without ever editing it.

    Much love and respect!!
     
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    WoW...
    pain is a -you know what- but it sure does educate...
    I wish you the best Jazz
     
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    This was raw, and certainly off the top. Yet n' still I feel ya, spillling your feel in write is the best way to feel better. These expriences of pain are the BEST, I go through them so often , each time I learn something new.


    The Dreamer
    sippin on lemonade too
     
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    hi DymePlaya2g
    this piece wow
    well felted
    very nice
    Peace
     
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