Black Poetry : Untitled (on purpose)

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  1. ghost_writer

    ghost_writer Member MEMBER

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    i've got poems that you will never see.
    ive got.. incomplete thoughts that may never breathe
    I
    once tried to tell a poem in braile...
    but people failed to feel what i read so..
    they sit.
    they sit and i think of em' in chains of ink
    kept on display in a paper cage
    locked away on discarded pages of my rhyme book, you see..
    i use to keep a rhyme book...
    but now i just keep a 5 Star insane assylum for imprisoned rhymes...

    lines and lines of crazy rhymes
    that are too ill to fill your ear
    so they...
    wander around blind
    in the corridors of my mind
    tryin to find the ears to listen...
    lost rhymes...
    but you won't find their discription on the 2% in the kitchen
    they're not missin
    not even misplaced
    they're just bein interrogated by the local D.A.
    he's an ex-rhyme cop, by the name of Writer's Block
    and he's been known to lock a few rhymes up for life in his lifetime...

    but it was alright, see...
    because their lawyer came by and
    she was a muse who had reviewed their case
    and was ready to debate
    Spoken Word VS. The State
    well... untill the judge gave the D.A. an intermission
    and once agian we were on break
    you see...
    complicated cases like these
    can take months to complete
    so in the meantime...

    they sit...
    they sit in solitary confinment untill i visit...
    flashing pictures of explicit thoughts cause by mental conjugal visits
    this is where they sit...
    and this is where i sit...
    looking at my rhymes though the bars of a cage
    A...
    K...
    A...
    the...
    blue lines on the page, and...
    too few of em' get out..
    no doubt
    i know on whos been in since January,
    i ain't put a single word down on his commissary since Febuary...
    by may his letters were
    R
    U
    O
    K
    and he asked y have u been away?
    but...
    how long have i been away?
    from my rhymes...
    my rhymes...
    rhymes...
    ****!....

    its been a long time...

    so i wrote a reply,
    i said i dont know why but i cant finish the end
    i'm tryin to write a way out but
    my pen
    my pen
    my pen
    my pen makes to many mistakes in doubt
    and i ache w/ frustration as i scribble the **** out...
    either... i cant write the right ending
    or the right ending is wrong...
    im jus tryin to post bail to bring one of my rhymes home
    but...
    speakin of not finishin a poem......

    (seriously... it's not done yet) :weights:
     
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    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cuz we've all been there. You are quite talented so it will all come back to you.
     
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    We could all do well by not finishing a poem in this way... Gee, where do I begin on this one? I think you truly captured the feeling of what it is to have rhymes and phrases captured in your mind, without the release of those thoughts by pen onto paper. I felt like you were sort of in my head, lol. Anywho, your word play was phenomenal. Fabulous write!
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ghost_writer:
    WOW!!!! This was remarkable. I can so relate. There have been times that months would go by and I would never feel inspired to write or I had the inspiration but the words just didn't seem to come out right. Then I have times when I have sooo much to say and the words just jump on the paper. This was really an awesome write.
    Much Luv
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoa now this un-marked no words can really do it justice
    this was mad tyte flow of the mind yet not finished
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow is all i can say flo on poet.
     
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    this was brilliant the se of analogy is excellent to no tbe complete it sure can compete with the best peots all over have to offer.
     
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    thanx much.. i appreciate the luv... i got a few more comin.. and i dont think ill ever finish this one... ironically i jus don think it would be right...
     
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