Black Poetry : Untitled (need some help fam)

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  1. quest

    quest Active Member MEMBER

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    sup fam this is me again quest constantly searching for the quest of knowledge through words. i am trying to figure out a title to this new poem i wrote maybe yall can help me out. let me know what you think the title should be

    -Untitled-

    The day I sleep is the day my death begins
    we have initiated the beginning of love coming to an end
    so let me look at you and pretend what our future,
    will be because the next day I may never see--you,
    and that is just too much.

    The day I sleep is the day I know you no more
    my head aches because my body needs rest
    but my mind loves you and love knows no rest
    so let this day be the best day of my life.

    Because today I met you, loved you,
    and made you my campanion, my wife to be,
    my mother to my childern, my future memory.

    It feels like hours turn into days, days to week,
    not a moment rest but I refuse to close my eyes I refuse to sleep.

    Today is yesterday and yesterday is tomorrow
    my eyes are open but my heart is full of sorrow from knowing,
    this pause in my life is just a glimpse and this last blink
    will be my final attempt to put a lifetime of love
    in just one day.

    quest (ache el)
    *expect something different for the next one*
     
  2. Afridancr

    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is incredible!

    I know I'm late but :wave: WELCOME!

    as for a title...I'm stumped!!
     
  3. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Quest im stumped on a title but I dig what you've done hea!!

    Much Respect & Welcome
    Reas
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I agree

    andone hellava tyght flow :D :toast:
     
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