Black Poetry : Untitled (musing in the midnight hour)

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ~inspired by Sade's 'Cherish The Day'~

    my greatest nightmare would frighten those
    who love me
    because off all the
    time, money & energy they
    sacrificed to see me
    well into adulthood

    and I've never been ungrateful
    even in my teens
    I worked and
    helped, and
    kept my grades
    didn't get pregnant
    stayed in church
    ...

    and I did things
    the way they expected...
    didn't sleep around
    (too much)
    didn't flunk out of
    college
    didn't become a
    drug addict
    (but I inhaled ~ often)
    and I marched in
    June
    (and not in August)...

    and I moved out
    and paid my own rent
    with my own money
    cuz I had a job
    and my own car
    continued my education
    bought my own clothes
    flirted with the
    brothaz
    danced just close
    enough to the fire
    to feel the heat
    without getting
    burned...

    and I believed that
    if I died
    "righteous" I would
    go to heaven

    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    my greatest nightmare would
    hurt those who
    brought me into this place...

    in all their rearing and
    instruction...

    life presented me
    with a truth they couldn't
    begin to teach me...

    ~your love~

    and dying "righteous"
    could mean

    living without you~


    ~my soul's greatest fear

    Alyce, 2001
     
  2. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    MS A....

    i have been refraining from saying what i'm gonna
    say... because i read somewhere that people only
    say it when they don't understand what you're tryin'
    to say.. but don't wanna appear ignorant... :)
    but when i was done reading... this one thought popped
    into my head...

    this is deep... deepa than oceans

    thank you for sharing... i say a lot of my life in
    your words... :)

    AlwaysLove...
    Sunshyne~
     
  3. belahni

    belahni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ooooh alyce!!!!!!

    the whole piece gave me a view into a life much like my own...doing everything 'by the book', especially

    "and I believed that
    if I died
    "righteous" I would
    go to heaven"


    and then this:

    "life presented me
    with a truth they couldn't
    begin to teach me...

    ~your love~

    and dying "righteous"
    could mean

    living without you~ "


    Girlfriend, it took a moment to make the connection with Sade's song. But it came back like the haunting refrain it is "if you were mine....if you were mine...I wouldn't want to go to heaven"

    Yeah, you deep Ms. A.


    B
     
  4. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I... HEAR... YOU

    i can completely relate to this piece. being raised the same way, feeling lost at times, feeling that i'm living my worst nightmare whether or not i stay in church... i needed this today, alyce. thank you.
    -7
     
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    Alyce, this is a powerful piece indeed. You've captivated my soul with this one.
     
  6. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sistaz & brothaz

    I'ma whisper this heah just one time, then I'ma go ...

    this is what happens when a love(r) so profound, comes into your life and makes you FEEL so RIGHTEOUS just from the mind touch, NOTHING will make you turn away from what is sure to become your demise. Not EVEN the promise of heaven.

    Thanks for feeling me.

    A
     
  7. cela

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    woooooww

    I can't even speak.


    CELA
     
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    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Great piece Al :heart:
     
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    Yeah Alyce....

    magnificent musing in the midnight hour!!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    truly a great ..

    piece of work here!
    Lovin' the scribe...
    keep doin' what you doing.
     
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