Black Poetry : Untitled Metaphor

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  1. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I see the moth, flickering towards the light,
    I watch the girl, what a watse of life,
    The addiction, the need to be high,
    The moth flying closer and closer....
    Trembling, shaking, suddenly set free,
    Flying, gliding through the dark, towards the end,
    The moth a shadow in the dark,
    The girl a shadow in her life,
    Light draws closer - a magnetic field,
    Pulling, straining, sucking them in,
    Kazap! The light is out.

    7/1/01
    *Emma*
     
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    wow nice work.

    don't get too many metaphors but this one's tyte

    nfinite
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    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks heaps j'hiah. Your words are too kind and it means a lot coming from someone as talented as yourself.
    *Emma*
     
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    a beautiful spray indeed ...........keep flowin' i'll keep reading!!
     
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    nicely done!
    this metaphor is pretty heavy...
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    Thank you Rich, love to see you here. Thanks for the read.

    Thanks for the compliment Wildflower, glad you fully grasped the depth of the words.

    *Emma*
     
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