Black Poetry : UNTITLED; but in thought...

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  1. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gentle
    Remarkably delicate...
    days and evenings spent as
    calculated steps until I see
    you again

    When I'm tired, you don't mind
    When I'm weary, it never bothers you
    When I'm fatigued, you lend your support

    At 9:00 post mediem we meet at the
    same place, same space~
    I'm always ready for whatever journey
    you have in store

    I never ask you questions-
    It's a matter of trust
    After all, you've never been with
    anyone else - 'cept me
    ...only I...

    You're iMpReSsEd with my contour and
    I too am impressed in you
    A "calming affect" is how I describe you
    A simple definition for angelic repose

    .......an entrance
    ...........a beginning
    ...............a portal
    to examine my daily thoughts, fears, and
    any sudden ecstacies -
    you absorb whatever
    I saturate you with

    I share all my secrets with you
    knowing you won't disclose or reveal-
    I laugh in you
    I cry in you
    you elevate me; exclusively
    bare my secrets of the soul
    you are a constant/comfort
    my prayers pass through you

    ...softly until oscitancy summons
    Where will we go tonight?

    Take me to the land of
    reverie...
    phantasy......or nod
    as I close my eyes
    and lay me down
    fly away - far away
    a sanctuary...
    majestic castle in the air
    introduce me to MORPHEUS the
    "mesmeric one"
    as you did the night before
    -he offers hypnogenetic opiates
    for free.....
    to free; and
    set free
    my mind, body, & spirit

    what he provides will re-produce
    phantasmogoric dreams
    that penetrate, ease, -- subdue
    making it easier for me to hold onto
    you

    no bolster;
    no sham needed

    ....allow me to put on my
    robe-de-nuit;
    just a second and I'll
    slip into
    my pall----aise
    -I'll be ready in a moment
    and I'll
    come for the
    soft.........sooth-ing......sedative
    ummmmmhh!

    rest assured~
    I love what you do for me~
    my
    fluffy...-PILLOW-
     
  2. Desert Storm

    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OH yea!

    I meant to reply to this one and I forgot! YOu be bangin with this one comin with the heat. I have think I have to give you 10 stars * * * * * * * * * *!!!!!! :hot:
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Storm~

    comin wit da' heat -eh?!

    Well, I like to thank Morpheus
    fo' the thangz he does to me
    hypnogenetically - at his castle
    in the air!
    Ya' heard!!

    Sissa-guuuurrll -thank ya'
     
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    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ok, this had me going either way when I got to this verse:

    "When I'm tired, you don't mind
    When I'm weary, it never bothers you
    When I'm fatigued, you lend your support"

    Then I get to the end and you talking bout' yo pillow. This is refreshing indeed. You can read this either way like I did. I like the hook.


    One
     
  5. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    UbZoRbShun

    Danka~
    Gracias~
    Thanks~

    Glad this piece caught your mind's eye, and
    had you hooked - by the pillow!
     
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    interesting...the way you allow our conscious to paint it's own perception of whom you are talking and then open our subconsious with the truth...the pillow. forgive me but i am not dissecting this piece, i just love the way you scribed it. very familiar style...yes very familiar...


    excellence has visited us today
     
  7. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Dnommo

    I too thank you for allowing
    me to wake up your mind's eye this morning
    with this piece!
     
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    and awaken

    me and my mind...you did! Beautiful Poet!


    A :)
     
  9. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alyce~

    So your mind's eye let you wander a bit?
    Well, I won't tell, cause heck - when I wrote
    this piece, I started to mess my own head up!!
    And quite a bit too - it was hard staying on
    track - with the focus to remain my PILLOW...
    I could have been all over the place wit dis one.

    Thanks for reading!!
     
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    HEY!!!! Where can I get a pillow like this?????
     
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