Black Poetry : untitled (3-24-12)

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  1. skuderjaymes

    skuderjaymes Contextualizer Synthesizer MEMBER

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    you shoot at me--​

    think I shot at you..​


    I shoot back​

    and kill you;​


    was I wrong?​

    was I right?​


    will you forgive me​

    in this next life?​




     
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    Guess we never know
    awesome piece
     
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    Dear Poet Brother Skuderjaymes,

    This itty bitty poem is chock full of meaning, deliberation, feelings, remorse and thought. A murder by misunderstanding. You've made me feel sorrow for the murdered and the murderer. That thought kind of makes me feel sad and sick inside. Anger exists inside as well...perhaps if there were no guns present these two subjects may have simply started a conversation and begun a friendship. Good job, eliciting emotions from a reader. Large poem. Thank you for sharing.

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