Black Short Stories : untiled(not sure of one yet)

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  1. ashleighsampson

    ashleighsampson Member MEMBER

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    heyyy evry1 iam new i've been checking out the board and everyone's stories are soo good i LUV dem keep em coming. i've been workin on a story of my own/OK iam a little nervous about writing this so i need everyones support please tell me what you think and dont hold bac hoping you'll like it ENJOY(spelling might be a little off dont mind it)




    BROOKLYN 1995(prodomatenatly<? afrocentric)

    Hanging with her girl Olina at a party in Fortgreene park Zora is dancing letting everyone know she's not afraid to show what she's got at 5'5 with brown eyes and a honey complexion.While she's gettin her groove on she catches a glimpes of a gourgeous man lookin at her who looks about 6'2, with shoulder length dreds ,dark chocolate complexion that could melt in your mouth with muscles at every end.When Zora notices him staring she imediatley tells ha grl lina
    "lina do you see that guy? He keeps looking at me"
    "where?"
    "right over there"she says pointing secretly
    "oh grl thats Denieric he's a friend of Keith aint he FIONE"
    " How come i never heard you say a word about HIM?"
    "I did a few times i guess you werent paying attention"
    "i guess not because i dont remeber you sayin his name "
    "yea well he's the friend who took the family photo of me Keith and the baby"
    "Oh that gorgeous picture hanging in your bathroom oh wow he's pretty **** good if he made Keith 'look' good"
    "You know what you need to stop talking about my husband"
    "C'mon grl you know iam playing,but any way what did you say his name was?"
    "Denieric ....why so many questions huh you like him?"
    "oh please i dont even know his last name"
    "Does it matter?**** he's fine if i werent married that would be me"
    laughing Zora says
    "..well he do look kinda cute"
    "oh you must be on crack because he's not just kinda cute,**** you betta recognize"
    As Zora is laughing she notices him coming towards them
    "Hey Lina how's evrything?" giving lina a kiss on the cheek
    "everything is everything how bout you?"
    "Oh iam good iam good"
    "Thats great..... o this is my good friend Zora" he looks straight into her eyes and says
    " Zora ?thats a pretty name it suites you"
    "Thank you"
    "I am guessing you know Zora Neale Hurston"
    "Yes i was named after her my mother loved her books" a little impressed
    "yea"after being lost in her gaze he says"oh iam sorry i forgot to mention my name ...Iam Denieric"
    "Yes i know it's,you have a pretty interesting name too"
    "well you know my name already huh so i see you've been talking about me ,was it all good?"
    "well see we.."
    "iam just joking with you"
    "yea i knew that"
    "alright ya'll can keep talking if you want but iam going to hit the dance floor "
    Zora had totally forgot that olina was there
    "yea i feel like dancing too what about you Zora?"
    "sure why not"she couldnt pass up this song it was YOU KNOW HOW TO LOVE ME BY PHYLIS HYMAN
    he could sho nuff knew how to move i mean he got down i could hardly keep up
    "YOU KNOW I SAW YOU DANCING EARLIER WHEN THE MUSIC WAS SLOWER YOU LOOKED GOOD NICE MOVES"
    "O THANKYOU" trying to overpower the music....so he was checking her out
    " GOOD LYRICS"
    "YEA I LOVE THIS SONG"
    "ME TOO SHE VERY TALENTED" after dancing they are chilling by his car
    "so what do you do" hoping i didnt sound iliterate
    "I am in construction"
    "really?"
    "yea ..Hey its not the best job but i get by you kno"
    "hey no one's judging **** iam a waitress"
    "oh yea?.. well then you kno"
    "hell yea"she adds a little laugh
    "i do other jobs on the side like selling my art and photos iam really into that also since they always laying people off , thats the kinda **** i can't stand about construction"
    "yea i heard they do lay pple off alot .. i can understand , i try and make extra money myself on saturdays i teach urban dance at the boys and girls center"
    "really?thats cool...i might check that out one day "
    "yea you should but becareful sometimes they can be rowdy and a little too agressive ,but sweet at times" she let out a nervous laugh
    "I have no problem with kids their our future"
    now how many time have you heard that?
    "yea..so are you into music? because you defietnatly knew what you was doin on the dance floor"
    showin off the sexiest smile dimples n all he replies"yea well i had a group growing up were we would sing and dance at talent shows and such"
    "oh so he sings too"
    "So i've been told but i dont like to brag"
    smile"play any instruments?"
    "oh yea since i was young i took piano,guitar and trumpet lessons"
    " wow very impressive"
    "well my mother wasnt gonna have me on the streets ripping and running so there my *** was practicing getting joked on too by other kids because i wasnt "GANSTA" enough "
    "atleast your not on the street strung out like some of them probably are now"
    "True" they start heading inside
    tryin to break the silents she asks
    "how long have you been growing your dreds?"
    "uhh about a year almost "
    "they grow fast because it's already by your shoulders"
    she says while examining his lucious locs
    "yea they do...."he notices how she looks at them"you like them dont you?"
    "yea i always did lik dreds they are very sexy to me"
    "oh they have that effect on alot of people"
    "is that why you got it?''
    "maybe" he says in a very seductive manner"i needed a change "
    "i guess it was a good one ..but who am i to say"
    he threw her a smile
    "you know iam observing your features and i would just love to just paint a picture of you or take a photo you just give me that inspiration"
    "really ?thats sweet of you to notice my beauty"she's laughing"i never posed for an artist maybe one day you will it sounds like fun"
    "yea it would be you should think about it"
    "yea i will.....hey were's olina"
    "she with Dijmon helping with the music"he says pointing to her
    "o.i see her ...so...i'll talk to you later before we leave?"
    "o no doubt i'll be over here setting up"
    "o ok"she goes to olina
    "hey lina whats up where have you been?"
    "WHATS UP?WHERE DA HELL I BEEN? everytime i looked you and Ric was somewhere else TOGETHER
    "be quiet he probably can hear you"
    "BE QUIET?we at a **** partyhis *** can't hear us"



    i'll post more later lol i really want to finish now but iam sleepy ya'll kno how it is lol! hoping to get good reviews peace~ n ~hair grease
     
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    welcome welcome welcome !!!

    first let me welcome u to destee.com short stories
    welcome to the house of lovin peace & respect
    welcome from above as i bless this some love
    this was a very nice tyte story and i wish u finish it
    i'll be looking for the next pt in all keep your stroke
    and write we family so relax and continue
    I really like it ! again welcome :terrific: :hi: :hi:
     
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    thankyou sooo much i was half sleep when writing so some parts you may be lik what?lol thnx again 4 support
     
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    most welcome sound like a Club mixing
     
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