Quiet Poetry Lounge : Unsaid love

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by kente417mojo, Aug 31, 2004.

  1. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jan 22, 2004
    Messages:
    3,756
    Likes Received:
    34
    Gender:
    Male
    Ratings:
    +34
    I sense love
    unsaid love
    from your fingertips
    to your toenails
    maybe you're hesitant because of
    yesterday's pain
    without a doubt
    love's good and bad
    determines the day's weather
    and can stretch well beyond years
    bringing miles of sunshine
    swallowed whole by fog
    which do you choose?
    unless I tell your fortune
    I'll never know
    the love flowing
    through your veins
    straight from your heart
    because I'm only human
    scarred flesh of my own
    pain I've also known
    and this seems to be
    your only glimpse of dishonesty
    not sharing your love for me
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Aug 26, 2003
    Messages:
    12,660
    Likes Received:
    191
    Location:
    somewhere ova da rainbow....
    Ratings:
    +219
    very nice write...
    feeling you on the emotion tip
    flow head on....Angel
     
  3. DA BROTHER LOVE

    DA BROTHER LOVE Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Aug 30, 2004
    Messages:
    137
    Likes Received:
    15
    Ratings:
    +15
    this one struck a chord with me.... its like hoping for someone to care for you, and feeling the pain of them never saying it... knowing they are holding back from fear.... nice write...
     
  4. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jan 22, 2004
    Messages:
    3,756
    Likes Received:
    34
    Gender:
    Male
    Ratings:
    +34
    Thank you Angel and DA BROTHER LOV. Yeah, I know I've had this happen and it's like "just say it already". Not having it said when you sense that it's there makes you wonder what's holding the person back. You can feel love and when it's not said it feels weird.Thanks for the replies. :peace:
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,977
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,177
    man this here took me back and how it once was
    da big change will come love ya flava on dis one !
     
  6. PurpleMoons

    PurpleMoons Administrator STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Apr 22, 2003
    Messages:
    9,146
    Likes Received:
    1,097
    Gender:
    Female
    Ratings:
    +1,102
    Hmmmm! Let me find out
    your'e doing your fortune
    telling thing in this piece!!!

    This piece makes ya go Hmmmmm,
    who told him!!!!!

    Loving your style!!!! :luvv:
     
  7. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    If it's not said, you'll never know, yet scary to reveal. Such a truthful flow poet.
     
  8. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jun 4, 2003
    Messages:
    2,845
    Likes Received:
    36
    Gender:
    Female
    Location:
    nyc
    Ratings:
    +43
    "scarred flesh of my own pain"
    wonderful recognition of self in this piece..
     
  9. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jan 22, 2004
    Messages:
    3,756
    Likes Received:
    34
    Gender:
    Male
    Ratings:
    +34
    $$RICH$$, PurpleMoons, Watz and deepy...thanks for your replies as always. You guys are the best. :luvv:

    Like Chaka Khan said "tell me something good, tell me that you love me".
    It's true. Let it be known.
     
  10. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Apr 5, 2004
    Messages:
    905
    Likes Received:
    9
    Occupation:
    administrative
    Location:
    Bowie
    Ratings:
    +9
    There's nothing like being in love, but having someone tell you, takes you to a whole other level. I loved this piece and can relate to it. Do your thing!
     
Loading...