Black Poetry : UnRuled Composition

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by caramelpython, Feb 6, 2005.

  1. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My life seems to be more stressd than blessed,
    I'm trying to breath but I have too much on my chest.
    I try to sleep but who can rest in this much mess?
    I try to write it out in my poetry so my soul can confess.
    I want to stand but I'm feelig less and less than A man I guess?
    There are too many deamons in my closet takeing A direct effect.
    I feel like a child with no night light and night brings on fright so my life is like the things that go bump in the night.

    Dreams of success are like dreams flowing down a pipe,
    It seems that the wind always crashes my happyness like a kite.
    Everybody loves me? Now that is a Big @zz Sike!
    They just pertend to be friends before they strike with A knife.
    Now how am supposed to trust another soul with Sh*t?
    Everyonetalks A good game but it's just venom they spit.
    How many times do I have to get up after they kick?
    I feel like my life is trying to get into shoes too little to fit.
    They are trying to convict my character but the charge wont stick!
    But they can tare A brother down bit by bit.
    I feel like A slave bg hit by that other end of the whip.
    See I'm not Kunta anymore they now call me Tobi.
    See I aint free anymore this Fu*ked up life done sold me.
    Now theese chains on my name can cause soo much pain it's insane.
    It seems like I'm the moth and life is the flame.

    No love in my life so there is no one to hold me and say it's alright.
    Dam......
    Where is my Queen to console me at night?
    Or is love just another Urban Legend that I will never ever hold?
    Love seems to be the "coldest winter ever" a beast with no soul.
    I feel like a dice in A Crap game and I'm just playing my "roll".
    Lights cameras action for this is just A permere.
    This is just some real type stuff im droping on here.

    J Brian / caramelpython
    Jagged-Python productions
    (c) 2005
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep emotions from a soul... lift your hands in praise because God loves you in his eyes its not time we must go through the storm to fine peace see one who been can lead peace be still the sun will shine ....Angel

    Always your friend no matter the tide
     
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    Python, first let me give you kudos for the poem in and of itself. Your words just place me there, in the heat of it, and the intensity of that heat is so strong it almost burns. I cannot always do a poetic piece justice when the pain is still raw. Sometimes all I can do is get the feelings out, and just let the scenerio speak for itself. You do that and more poet...awesome.
    And that place you take us, whew, goodness knows I've been there, geez, there are parts I am still wading in. But like blkangel said, God is good, and he will lead you through this. Peace brotha.
     
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    Dang, baby, this is just amazing from title to last line. I feel the rawness of which you speak in my own soul, for sometimes it all makes me feel less than a woman, too. I understand. You really broke it down, sweetie. Much love and respect for this. And peace.
     
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    soulfully connected this was off the hook
    felt the deep heart emotions rivering out
    man u out did ya self on this one .........
     
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    You really let it all out in this one. Some very deep thoughts shared. I felt this one. Sometimes it does feel like everything around us is just amped to go wrong. Keep the flow goin
     
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    caramel Bro .....
    this was tight and we feld it...

    but just know you know we all go trough this....

    I always say to people if you have walked a certain path that doesnt bring you fruits....that doesnt forfill you ...
    You have to choose another way and walk another walk and path...

    learn from youre mistakes and believe ..
    god is a good god...
    hold his hand and walk with him..
    and make shure you place no one above him..
    no woman no man
    (cause he says that youre not word for him than)


    Take care ..
    remember he knows youre name ...
    and has his eye on you ....
    make shure you have youre eyes on him and the big sky to..
    he loves you...






    lovelibertylady:heart:
     
  8. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks alot family for the reading of some inner poetic spit.
    Angel
    Rich
    gempis
    watzinaname
    Prizefighter16
    LibertyLady

    and to thge onew who read but didn't have time to respond I still thank u all.
     
  9. Khasm13

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    spit it all out bruh....
    then regurgitate sum mo...fa sho
    tyte joint...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks mt brother Khasm :thanks:
     
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