Quiet Poetry Lounge : Unknown Universe

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by oldsoul, Nov 11, 2004.

  1. OldSoul

    OldSoul Permanent Black Man PREMIUM MEMBER

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    Unknown Universe

    You are an unknown universe
    With trillions of energies
    Inside a billion atoms
    Of unknown galaxies.
    You are an unknown universe
    Full of emotional suns
    With millions of hugs and hold mees
    For all the unborn ones.
    You are an unknown universe
    Filled with oceans of planetary years
    Blackness flowing sweetly through
    Wisdom's uncountable tears.
    You are an unknown universe
    Unexplored starlites for miles
    Dancing on radiant moonsets
    A galatic rainbow of smiles.
    You are an unknown universe
    With extraordinary destinies
    Filled with the virgin expectations
    Of a billion galaxies.
    You are an unknown universe
    With a joyful essence pure
    You are an unknown universe
    And I am forever on tour.

    --©11/11/04--
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    this here make me think of self and a few that hold semly the unknown
    universe within a galaxy of reasons .....i really enjoyed this piece
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow.....this is one of those pieces that is awfully hard to comment on, because to do so pales in comparison to what lies before us. I will simply say, that it's not easy to describe the indescribable, but you surely took us on a trip to which is, beyond. Wonderful flow brotha.
     
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    Watz is right - I'm not sure what to say to do this piece justice, unless it might be "spellbound."
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very deep...into the mental deep..makes ya ponder and look at your surroundings....flow head on
     
  6. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it's awesome
     
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