Black Poetry : Unknown Cause, But Clear Effect…

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by waynethomas, Nov 18, 2008.

  1. waynethomas

    waynethomas Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Mar 24, 2007
    Messages:
    36
    Likes Received:
    2
    Ratings:
    +2
    Heard is his
    Barking towards her projected defensive aerial screeching,
    A continuing stalemate is found,
    Rather than either’s sought after conclusion of checkmate.

    While their
    Only bond of current connection is just sitting there,
    Crying.

    He didn’t mind the
    Engulfment of their smoke that filled his small lungs
    With each drag of breathe
    To let out his cry.

    He didn’t mind the
    Explicitness of syllables which
    Filled,
    Ended,
    And complete each of their irritated sentences,
    All between
    Each drag of his breathe
    To let out his cry.

    And I still mentally kick my self in to a state,
    Which clearly left me paralysed
    Rather than moving me to act,
    But one day I came home and placed down my cap and…
    There was no more crying.

    There was no
    Frustrated retorts as each tried unravel each others twine of words.

    I knew better
    But said it probably be better
    If I stayed out of this matter.

    Luke could have had better
    But now sleeps better than he ever would have,
    As now he doesn’t wake up any more to the distress of their screams.

    The truth is…
    Now, he just doesn’t wake up.



    Dúbb’l yoo T © 2008
     
  2. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jun 11, 2001
    Messages:
    7,648
    Likes Received:
    40
    Occupation:
    thrivin' spiritually/physically/emotionally/financ
    Location:
    where failure is not an option
    Ratings:
    +42
    wow

    very well written poet

    this is a story i know all too well

    maybe the street version is a little more blatant

    but the effect is clear

    like a said well written

    :lift:
     
  3. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 3, 2001
    Messages:
    3,429
    Likes Received:
    67
    Location:
    lend me some sugar.. l am your neighbor
    Ratings:
    +70
    ... an issue we need to challenge more fervently head on
    ... our sons wont be men, our daughters wont be ladies and they will choose
    nothing with standards.

    love it cuz,,
    jh.
     
  4. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    May 25, 2001
    Messages:
    4,182
    Likes Received:
    171
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Spreading Joy.... need some?
    Location:
    Sixburgh, Pa.
    Ratings:
    +221
    Hello Waynethomas...

    :wave:
    I enjoy the realness of your poetry,
    it always reads like lessons that many
    of us are in need of.

    I wish you would consider sharing your lessons more often.:)



    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
  5. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,978
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,178
    awesome piece right here
     
  6. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    Singapore
    Joined:
    May 13, 2003
    Messages:
    6,477
    Likes Received:
    110
    Gender:
    Female
    Occupation:
    Servant of the People
    Location:
    Bay Area, CA
    Ratings:
    +131
    like watching an after school special unfold
    :read:
    something that every young soul should heed
    preach on poet preach on :read:
     
  7. sweet apple*pie

    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    May 14, 2006
    Messages:
    1,034
    Likes Received:
    28
    Occupation:
    I am a student, and all though it is hardwork, it
    Location:
    East Coast
    Ratings:
    +30
    Hi Wayne

    This is the first piece I have read of you, and I enjoyed it friend. Pretty deep stuff here....stuff that maks me think. I like to think....


    Great flo brotha.
    :hearts4:
     
Loading...