Black Poetry : Unjustified Rant

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I sometimes tell myself
    that I'm not supposed to feel any pain
    that it doesn't burn if my hand touches fire
    that my face doesn't smart in the freezing rain

    It doesn't hurt when I miss the peace
    that I didn't realize I had
    You don't miss your water til your well
    runs dry, and this well is so empty, it's sad

    It's not painful to miss those who were near
    and dear, and then they had to depart
    I shouldn't feel it when love is allusive
    and there's a crack in the middle of my heart

    My teeth don't grit when I've been kicked in them
    I just smile and say, piece of cake
    I laugh when the ache wears down to the bone
    when nerve endings start to quiver and quake

    Yes, it's rip roaring fun
    When time has got me on the run
    and I can barely walk
    But, who am I to talk?
    I'm not supposed to feel any pain
    So, who am I to complain?
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi Sis
    It is amazing how we connect in so many ways
    And how right on time your poem is.
    Your whole poem is awesome sis.
    I'm going through another pasting in my family,
    and so we'll be going to his homecoming tomorrow my Mom brother.
    Indeed it does hurt, because one don't talk about
    it don't mean the hurt isn't there.

    Again so true, I feel myself in this flow
    We are only human, so ths experince is something
    we all have had a taste of in this life.
    Again your pen is psychic. I don't know
    when I will ever be able to write again.
    Peace and love sis!:grouphug:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is one of those writes where I'd prefer that the reader couldn't relate to it so much. I'm so sorry for your loss Sister Bluewater. You will pick up your pen again, it's just that writing is the furthest thing from your mind right now. Hugs to you, be gentle with yourself, we are with you in spirit.
     
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    Unjust is putting it mildly to say the least,
    A Queen has more strength than the wildest beast.
    We carry the weight of the world in our hand,
    yet still have the time to serve our man.
    When do we have time for tears and our pain?
    we're much to busy up-holding the game

    Awesome write poet, I can surely relate to this!!
     
  5. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queent, you brought even more reasons to relate to my words, sisters are no strangers to pain. I loved your response in flow, thank you.
     
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    Bluewater

    Our blessing are with you
    Stay strong

    Watz
    I enjoyed this flow
    You never know how deep a flow goes when it speaks
    If it touches
    If it helps
    It can help in the healing
    It has done no wrong
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    pain is felt by all

    how we decipher the pain
    is what matters

    things change

    and sometimes can change rapidly

    you have the right to complain

    but don't complain if you don't at least try to do something about what

    you're complaining about
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    True Hodee, we never know how our words will affect others. Thank you brotha.
    Complaining without trying to fix the problem is like flapping your lips in the wind--useless. Without change there is death. Thank you So'ja.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    when i look into this piece and think
    it always how i treasure the thoughts
    of a queen and her many pains the tears
    and even her fears beyond her great powers
    and how she stand up against any weather
    makes me love her more u really touch me
    deep wit this one Watz .........................
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Queens tend to keep standing no matter how forceful the winds. Thank you Rich for saying that it touched you so.
     
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