Black Poetry : Unititled

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Carameldlite, Jul 11, 2005.

  1. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jul 8, 2005
    Messages:
    37
    Likes Received:
    0
    Ratings:
    +0
    I sit in the moments
    Of my deepest despair
    Yet even with my own problems
    I'm still wondering if you even care
    My feelings are hurt
    And my mind is not at ease
    I'm feeling the kind of pain
    That brings grown men to their knees
    My very soul is crying out
    And I'm feeling so alone
    And after 3 messages
    You still won't pick up your phone
    Don't you understand
    That I'm really in need
    Can you even see
    That my heart is starting to bleed
    I'm hurt and I'm lost
    And I just need a friend
    Just someone to help me
    Bring my sorrow to and end
    There's nothing else I can do
    So I'll just try to sleep
    And let these tears come from my eyes
    And roll down my cheek
    So please if you ever
    Do find the time
    Please call me back
    So that I may unwind
    Cuz I just need a friend
    That will stand by my side
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Oct 4, 2003
    Messages:
    16,340
    Likes Received:
    114
    Location:
    Northeast
    Ratings:
    +122
    This piece really touched me, such an utter surge of loneliness. Deeply felt scribe poet.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Mar 21, 2001
    Messages:
    69,983
    Likes Received:
    3,978
    Gender:
    Male
    Occupation:
    BUSINESS owner
    Location:
    Da~WINDY*CITY //CHICAGO
    Ratings:
    +4,178
    the way it took me in
    from da call of a heartfelt friend

    try mines
    raise ya head high to the light
    in prayer ur be alright call on
    his unconditional love he will
    comfort u from above
    promise to never leave your side
    because in your soul is where he
    will reside call him up
    your never be along and always
    feel his warmth real strong

    this was one beautiful piece scribe.......
     
  4. Carameldlite

    Carameldlite Active Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Jul 8, 2005
    Messages:
    37
    Likes Received:
    0
    Ratings:
    +0
    Thanks for your input, Rich thanks for adding.
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Apr 16, 2003
    Messages:
    2,781
    Likes Received:
    15
    Occupation:
    College Student, Bookstore Clerk
    Location:
    ...down south...
    Ratings:
    +16
    this was well written...emotional too...
     
  6. BrownEyed Girly

    BrownEyed Girly Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Joined:
    Dec 27, 2004
    Messages:
    53
    Likes Received:
    0
    Ratings:
    +0
    This was really beautiful. And strong outpouring off feelings...i loved it.
     
  7. Poetrymama

    Poetrymama Well-Known Member MEMBER

    Country:
    United States
    Joined:
    Jul 16, 2004
    Messages:
    633
    Likes Received:
    4
    Ratings:
    +6
    re:Needing a friend

    This is a beautiful poem of pure emotions and feelings expressed.