Black Poetry : Unfaithful

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  1. kente417mojo

    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You must think
    you can appear
    only when lust flows through your veins
    only when you need to feel love
    only when he's out of town
    when your self-esteem's on the ground
    Oh...you can appear
    and call me late nights??
    Not to express love
    but to make love
    to sweet music
    though ours hearts are not on that same loving page
    we've never seen the outside of the bedroom
    and that doesn't bother you
    I know when your number appears
    at 12:24 a.m.
    arguments have stemmed
    you need a way out
    time to breathe
    a warm bed to occupy
    without him in it
    foolishly my door stays open
    midnight air finds it's way in
    along with a married woman
    and you just know you can come in
    never a doubt in your mind
    though there is in mine
     
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    VERY DEEP WORDS!!!!!!
    VERY NICE FLOW!!!!!
    KEEP FLOWING LIKE THIS!!!!!!!!!








    :D
     
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    well pose well felt deep scribing indeed
    flow on
     
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    that's exactly how these types of relationships are...someone is always compromising....very nicely done...NicoleM
     
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    this is a very deep flow
    what i feel from it
    is sadness, because
    it is speaking to me
    that the poet wants more
    then a midnigt call
    wonderful release
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    Doesn't sound like this is where you want to be, or should be. Sounds like an ache to be put first. Well written scribe.
     
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    You have many and great reason to have doubts...
    When the going gets tough...she runs to you, but...what if, by some chance your not home? ...do she pounce on someone else? ...and when she pounce, who's to say...he's not pouncing too? ...again, where do that leave you?...(healthwise)...you have very good reason for doubt.
    very good poem...I like where your head is at...keep moving...
     
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    really tight piece on a place that's so hard to be in. peace, my friend, peace.
     
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    kente417mojo Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you all for your great comments. :thanks:
    Unfortunately the ring doesn't mean much on either end of these situations. Indeed a very troubling situation and like queentswana stated it is a dangerous one as well for health reasons. Thanks a lot family and much love to you all.
     
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