Black Poetry : Unfaithful

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  1. PrincessFlowz

    PrincessFlowz Active Member MEMBER

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    broken glass; vases and plates
    bloodshot eyes and trembling hands
    angry gestures and
    tears that wont cease to fall
    loud sounds; more than likely screams
    her perfume laces your clothing
    obscene words, piercing my heart
    betrayal, hate, and distrust
    love letters adressed to her;
    "how you doin?" letters
    adressed to the one you love
    ashamed, pissed, embaressed
    you never thought I'd find out......
    Hold me baby.....I'm scared
    I dont want this to be us.
     
  2. angelicsage

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    This was intense imagery...
    nice twist on the ending
    my emotions were racing
    through every line...

    Great flow!
     
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    wow what a twist on this...
     
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    I feel the emotion in there... nice expression
    thanks for sharing
     
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    this got me thinking,
    about the things i do.
    but i am faithful,
    and its good to know you realize when it can happen to anyone to anyone like you.........tyte scribe
     
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    whoaaaaaaa!!!
    scribe on from the mental play
    had me wondering
     
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    PrincessFlowz Active Member MEMBER

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    Thanx everyone for your support :)
     
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    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The pain is this peice is deep.. but the work is great.
     
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    Man...

    this is really tyte. I can feel u here... I can hear u here...
     
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    i loved it...very nice twist
     
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