Black Poetry : Undetectable girl

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  1. PatriceCQueen

    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Last evening I woke up beautiful
    I had showered
    Washed my hair and coiled it
    With small black sponge rollers
    Ever so tightly that the scalp speaks

    Then I lay down while playing games on laptop
    A perfect combination for sleep
    Like curling up with a good book
    The kind that lets you make pictures in your mind
    Develop scenes that you would not regret paying money to see

    I entered dream world unwilling
    Till I got to a place where my scalp demanded relief
    Reneged on the agreement about this hairstyle
    I went to the mirror and entered early release program
    When I looked up to behold myself
    I saw that pretty little girl that escaped from me
    I wondered if there were ways to keep her

    In the morning she was still around
    Eyes sparkling and smiling like if she hid the sun in her pocket
    The realization of her made my stomach hurt
    I was still beautiful and I wondered how
    How am I to remove the many layers I hid her
    So she can be out all the time
    Nothing about me I want to destroy at this moment
    For today I woke up beautiful

    Patrice C. Queen 8/20/06
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    beautifully as alwayz and surely very detectable
    PCQ......................................................................
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow i'll snap my fingers to that. wake up scrumptious gurl i aint mad at cha!!!!!
     
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    That's what's deemed as a beautiful "Wake-up" call...
    That's when one finds themself
    ..from all the suffercation that plaques our entire being.
    ^5 to the beauty again found.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Truely a lovely write.


    Much luv
     
  6. PatriceCQueen

    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was just having fun

    it was a kewl piece to do

    thanks

    Patrice
     
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    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks

    Patrice

    thanks for reading
     
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    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You always understand and see to the depth of things

    thanks again

    Patrice
     
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    abstract219 ...standing on the shoulders of giants MEMBER

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    reading this today makes me feel so nice...a very literal write...

    great write.
     
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    Beautiful!!!!!!! if we could only ride the wave of our self esteem like this everyday, think of all the problems us sista's could avoid.... i loved reading that!
     
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