Black Poetry : Underneath the Under things (about fake *** poetry nights)

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  1. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wrote this after attending an Open Mic night that tried
    waaay to hard to be what they were not.
    After running a successful Open Mic night for two years in the Glass City (Toledo,Ohio)-
    it was very evident to me and my peeps that the people
    running this new night had a clue, but did it for all the wrong reasons.
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    "Underneath the Underthings"



    Underneath the Under things,
    You - oh so traveled soul
    How ever many years old
    How deep is a depth that speaks it's own depth ?
    Underneath your epiphanies & Self Awakenings
    you're still asleep ... yeah, still asleep.

    Under the surface you dug-
    found & worked out some bugs
    covered the rest w/ area rugs
    and PROclaimed from mountain peaks
    the very depth of your deep

    But Underneath the Underthings
    Your scarred/ fractured healing
    is a broken cotton gin and the South IS TRULY DEEP.
    So how far down is your depth if we can still hear You speak ?


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    To all peeps running poetry nights out there:
    Don't try to sell something every five minutes.
    Don't profess to be the deepest, most spiritually attuned soul
    in the cosmos.
    Don't read 11 times in one night just cuz it's your place.
    Don't make a mockery of yourself and the art.
     
  2. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    Underneath your epiphanies & Self Awakenings
    you're still asleep ... yeah, still asleep.


    yo this was on dun
    yo glad to see you back

    yes this piece was funny and phat and deep
     
  3. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks alot.
    If you're in Brooklyn , i'm sure you don't have to worry
    about any fake poetry nights - i'm sure it's all real as can be.
    I haven't been to NY yet, but maaaan - it's the place for me.
     
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    "How deep is a depth that speaks it's own depth ?"

    ^that and the end were my favorite parts of the poem and although i have never been to a live poetry reading i can understand where your comeing from. some people will never get it huh?

    i once heard in a song in which i dont remember that
    "just beacuse people dont understand what your saying dont me what you saying is deep"

    for some reason that always stuck with me and it couldnt be more true.

    good poem
    hope to read more of you soon
     
  5. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hypnotize.


    a-men! brother poet! a-men!! :)

    it is good to see you around this way one
    mo' gin... kinda makes me wanna pull
    GA_Sunshyne out again so you can tell me
    how cool i am... but! that i'm just too ****
    old for you!! :lol:

    your words have been missed... don't stay
    gone so long next time!! (****!!) :D

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hyp although I've never been to one other than the one we do online that would really blow my high (poetry high cause i done started rehab)...
     
  7. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LMAO!! this is too **** funny!!! i feel ya...lol

    i went to one where a girl came dressed as eryka badu...she usually wears sweats or hoochie wear...i found that rather entertaining
     
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    Hyp - all about the realness of your insight! true that! i applaud you.

    but i have one question - Did anyone with a real clue, a real poet, who had done a real open mic.... take a minute to school the brothers and sisters?

    To be preacher and/or teacher is to perfect the art and bring strength to the novice poets and hosts like myself. i am young at this and would like to think that my brothers and sisters who have been there/done that would help bring me along.

    help a young brother out????

    ....or was this a case where ego/arrogance would prevent growth. been there too. Peace.
     
  9. brotherman

    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yo, I am guilty for I try to read as much as I can when given a mic...sorry...but all the same I understand you insight and i too, tend to get defensive when the artform is used for everything else other than its initiative -which is in my opinion to touch, motivate, inspire and inform....please let me know if I am failing the true nature of the purpose of spoken word...or am I just a good writer? I can take the truth...holla.
     
  10. shaz

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    so basically you just
    wont em to
    keep it Real!
     
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