Black Poetry : Unconscious:pt. 2 (The Voyage)

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  1. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Where am I?
    All around me is darkness and grief.
    Men lying at both sides, my head and my feet.
    But I can't see how many cuz I can hardly move.
    Large iron shackles have replaced my shoes.
    My arms are cuffed to the men at both sides.
    The one to my left smells as if he died.
    I have no idea how long I've been here.
    Never to see my Queen and build my empire is a constant fear.
    Sunlight...
    The one that brings food comes down holding a gun and keys
    Unlocking our chains and temporarily setting us free.
    Only to be herded on deck like cattle,
    Forcing us to jump and dance.
    That one dropped his guard,
    This could be my only chance.
    So I pounce on him like a lion hunting it's prey,
    But a blow to the back of the head turned my clear vision to grey.
    I'm unconscious....
     
  2. PoeticAlize

    PoeticAlize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dang...i dont even kno what to say.
     
  3. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Work the floetic!

    Liking the way this epic evolves! Wonderful imagery!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!
     
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  5. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Part 2, back in effect.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was just about to look for the rest :) lol
    and it was worth the wait
    a steady reminder of where we came from is always healthy
    thank you brotha
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!!!
    been waiting on this very tyte scribe
    is pt.3 in the makings?
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow..leaving me speechless here..
    ummm...Angel
     
  9. PositiveMindset

    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    triniti, thank U wholy, & that's the double truth. If U don't know where you're from, U don't know yourself.

    $$, everything is done, just gotta let it all set in, don't wanna overwhelm the minds. Pt. 3 will make it's appearance very soon.

    mzblk, your speechlessness says more than words can, thank U
     
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    Officially impressed!

    the journeys you take me on with your writing
    are beyond this dimension...
    the imagery and emotion so perfectly intertwined...

    I'm truly speechless...
    (can't wait for the continuance)

    :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown: :bowdown:
     
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