Black Poetry : unconscious…

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by triniti424, Dec 1, 2003.

  1. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oh my goodness sister
    the tragic tale you have unfold
    eyes wide open
    as it has indeed touch me
    got to embrace who we are
    with out shame but with pride
    this is a deep heartfelted
    thought induce flow
    a pencil will not erase who we are
    and white out won't work either
    much love and respecct
    Peace
     
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    Zen Master_1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Preach it

    triniti424, This is a sad but true message and at some point in time we need to really look at ourselves in this surrounding, for it is not home, too much conflict on a daily basis. Hopefully, we can take this to heart and make changes for our future survival.
     
  4. Khasm13

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    you captured the essence
    of the brunt of our issues with
    this well told sad tale...
    trin...this board needs your wisdom
    please share more...i aint to proud to beg
    peace
    khasm
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice to see you back, sistah. this is raw and beautiful at the same time. just dope.
     
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    Peace to U triniti424!!!

    let the souls say ashey, ashey, ASHEY!!!
    this flow is so on point!!! i like ur words, da picture u paint
    the MESSAGE... u let sank (a lil country :) ) right into da dome!!!
    i pray u keep letting these words of wisdom flow like a river...

    peace & blessings
    nadia*binta
     
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    wow.........
     
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    very deep and the sorrow of this flow
    wow!! my heart reach out at this moment to
    any brutha & sista
     
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    I echo every word that was posted before me, this is truly a wonderful piece that opens the mind.

    Very nicely done, indeed.
     
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    the thinner the blood
    the stronger our people will be
    is a fable
    like a scooby doo mystery
    check out the scene
    cause it can get kinda grisely
    not knowing
    where ya going
    mentality slowing
    lawnmower man mowing
    for prescribing to the notion
    dat greed and lust
    are the magic potion
    to part lifes ocean
    but instead you end up on a cot
    dying
    wondering how your body will rot
    not believing in you and yours
    has you at the hospital dead on the spot
    before a single blood droplet
    splatters on top
    of the concrete pavement
    every night i pray to the Lord
    please stop mental enslavement