Black Poetry : Unbeknowing

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  1. PoeticAlize

    PoeticAlize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    unbeknowing to you

    she cried

    she didn't even try to stop them

    just let them fall

    weakness mixed with despair

    unbeknowing to you

    she learned your colours

    all of your true colours

    she's not your mature - model girlfriend

    she's not your scholarly - cook and clean girlfriend

    she's not wifey

    and she's never gonna be good enough

    unbeknowing to you

    her spirit died in that moment

    she will never be the same

    you've devastated her world

    in more ways than one

    giving her hopes of things

    you knew she couldn't amount to

    feeding her family suppresants

    so you could freely cum in her world

    destroying her from the inside out

    trust plus honesty equals options

    options she was denied

    unbeknowing to her

    she didn't care

    cuz you held her hand

    if only for a second

    if only for a night

    she felt like she was yours

    and would be forever

    unbeknowing to her

    you thought in the hours

    it would take to reassure her

    **** her

    and forget her

    but unbeknowing to you

    she will rise

    she will grow

    she will love herself... again
     
  2. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My heart is crying, for this write has been delivered to me at the WORST time.

    PoeticAlize, this was truly raw. This was tragic and beautiful.

    Whoa, let me see more. This was a good write.

    Thank you for sharing.

    ~Ikoro
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep and felt yet sad and strong
    awesome
     
  4. PoeticAlize

    PoeticAlize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx for the love...

    and its sad and raw - cuz as the my tears flowed - so did my pen

    much love
     
  5. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!!!!
    This is amazing.
    I love this.
    U had me hanging on yr every word.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was beautiful in all it's unbridled honesty. Many have been in this space, perhaps not in each and every crevice, but in this space none the less. Such a well written piece poet.
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What a lovely scribe. Really nice work!!!
     
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    spicybrown Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Likea rose growing amidst concrete...SHE shall rise. Beautiful and empowering drop poet:spinstar:

    :)

    :picture:
     
  9. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Had to bring this one back.

    Still raw!

    One,

    - Ikoro