Black Poetry : (un)dress rehearsals... act 1, scene 1

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by sraheem2, Jul 15, 2002.

  1. sraheem2

    sraheem2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was thinking about the way the lady handles me
    deftly, expertly
    even now as I watch her dress
    she’s working me

    Her hands graceful, always
    take my mind to those places
    she caresses as I gaze hypnotized
    by her fingers bringing me to
    full attention
    as they glide her French cut
    bikinis up her rounded ***
    and snap snugly, softly against her
    waist

    I love thinking about the way the lady deals with me
    creatively, effectively
    turning slightly so her profile
    entices me
    topless, voluptuous, sensuously
    teasing me

    inviting me to join her,
    wordlessly,
    in the first of many scenes in
    our one act play

    I love the way she gives me my cue
    a flash of her eyes, her tongue on her lips
    I move toward her center stage
    on my mark

    we fade to black



    Saleem
     
  2. msluciousb

    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    aWWWWWW SUKIE SUKIE NOW!

    TALK THAT TALK BOYYYYYYYYYYEEEEEE! AND I MEAN THAT IN A RESPECTFUL WAY....THIS WAS FILLED WITH BEAUTIFUL ,SENSUOUS, YET TASTEFUL IMAGERY!!!!!!
    I LOVED IT!
    BLESSINGS ON YA HOUSE!:D
     
  3. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I was thinking about the way this piece will inspire many to practice...practice...practice...

    wonderful performance, my brotha!

    alyce
     
  4. Gaylee

    Gaylee Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    PHEWEEEEE! This was a hot read! This imagery is one us gals can relate to showing, but seeing the emotions and appreciation in your words make us appreciate you gentlemen even more. Thank you for this one for sure. And I am studying it, for practice, practice and practice, being new to poetry and all.
     
  5. smilin_dwarf

    smilin_dwarf Active Member MEMBER

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    Super, well crafted. Gifted imagery and well crafted tight poetry. Admittedly I also find it titillating, lol. Thanks.
     
  6. Natasha

    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow

    I totally aggree, the imagery here is fabullous !

    Nice flow
    Natasha
     
  7. GA_Sunshyne

    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you.


    ...this was delicious. :)

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
  8. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "....we fade to black"

    Excellent wordage

    I can picture my ol lady doing the same thang
    and now i'm ready for Take 2!

    NittyGrit