Black Poetry : ugly

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  1. THA HOOKUPMAN

    THA HOOKUPMAN Banned MEMBER

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    The first time she came
    She came to me in cornrows
    I was signing cd’s in the back of one of one of those poetry readings shows
    and she
    Came to me and said she had been listening to the cd and
    Realized
    That
    we
    Should be
    Together
    Said wasn’t the fist time that I met her
    But honestly I wasn’t surprised
    I’ve gotten my share of complements and encouragement
    Because of my need for acceptance that has often led to me waking up in places that I should have not have been
    But again I guess my words seem like oxygen in these dark days where a lot of men are scared to open up to their voanabilites and let the soul of a strong woman inside of them but then again poetry has been making me

    ugly


    Lovely words make woman like her come to me and I don’t believe that she simple wants a one nite stand and I mean
    This is poetry as a pose to hip hop or R&B
    I honestly believe that she wants me to be her man
    Exclusively
    Continuously
    And if was it was intimately fine
    Cause when am physically attracted
    To a woman I can do things that change her entire concept of time
    Tap into her essence
    Until days go by like hours in her mind
    Bliss
    Manifest my propitious incarnation all around both of us
    Till for us
    Nothing else in this universe continues to metaphysically exist
    Priceless
    I make sure that she’s sure that she knows that I know that she’s priceless

    But life is funny right now see I
    Always been the type to wanna have a lil more then I would ever get
    And I think its ugly that could be leaving one beautiful woman
    And already be thinking about pleasing the next that’s why my life has always been this relationship between stresses an sex
    There’s always be this relationship between having to many lovers an having too many regrets and yet
    She says that she feels like we
    Should be together
    And I wonder if she understands that I get these types of offers on regular bases
    So many incredible minds
    So many incredible bodies
    So many incredible faces
    And lord knows
    I go so many places
    Between Detroit an san Antonio
    I think it would be beautiful
    to be
    Able to tell some woman
    In Amsterdam or Germany that the answer is unequivocally no!

    Then focus on the one woman that I have to come home to
    To tenderly dress and sensually message and personally recite poems too I keep telling my self that its foolish to believe that one woman wont do and
    After she said what she said I put my finger tips in to the cornrows of her hair and said
    I want u
    I want u to be the person continuously
    And unequivocally takes away my ugly...

    :flamet: hookup
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well done i like how u express dis here flow on !
     
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    don't fight it hookupman....just go with that cornrowed hair
    and be blissful.... give up that "stresses and sex" you be talking bout
    let all that "not surprised" person FOCUS
    i enjoyed your flow...
     
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    Man, you really took me along on this one. HOOKUP, I get the feelin you think too much like I do. But dang it can sure bring up some great pieces, like this one. *wink*
     
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    Many of us share that gift...of drawing individuals
    to the beauty of our words...and the naked display
    of our soul...through prose...
    but who really knows...the other side of the soul
    the side...that the sun doesn't reach
    and while...the "symbolic" cornrows are attractive
    to even the most novist poet...we know that
    "ugly"...will leave them forever changed
    forever...seeing poetry, differently

    Deep...but clear,
    Loving your work, beyond words,
    Sage
     
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    There is beauty in seeing beyond the obvious. Flow on brotha poet.
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    it is possible, and she just might be the one -good luck.
    very nice read
     
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    nicely written...i liked this piece alot...
     
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    Clutchin my heart, been in a similar situation and it is heart wrenching, man pain and (the need for) love are amazing forces and your words brought out all the emotion, whoa! To bare the ugly of your soul in poetry takes guts. Giving you madd respect for that. Sounds like the ugly has faded, I know mine has over time.

    Wonderfully read piece.
     
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