Black Poetry : uGly (Unfamiliar)

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  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Cosmopolitan Gurls
    in short skirts struttin their "stuff"
    for all to see....lookin down upon the lesser bodies
    situated in bars, trapped inside a Bottle of Jack Daniels
    tipping off the edge of a cliff to kill them...
    (only they didn't know)

    I remember ghost tormenting her
    that sat in dark rooms
    wit spiked chains around their necks...
    pointing gnarled fingers at her face...
    all up in the kool-aid but don't know the flavor...


    her eye's dilated,
    her soul was constipated
    clogged up wit lies, cries,
    soiled wit insecurities from the ghost
    that inhabited her HelL,

    why was her life like a rollercoaster
    she listened to what they say,
    wondered afterword why she did...
    would sit and listen to music in dark rooms

    and be Unfamiliar/Invisible to all...

    to be continued...

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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i've seen it know it and wonder
    tyte drop pt.2 please
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    When a chain of unfamiliar faces becomes the norm, something isn't right. Alright now, waiting for more.
     
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    i hear ya on dis...
    flow some more
    where part 2 at little sis
     
  5. SensualReality

    SensualReality Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Story....I was a lil' lost there :lol:,but you pulled me on through them faces I want part two darlin':wink:
     
  6. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Like the rest...I am waiting for pt.2 as well, that was a very good scribt...but everything that you write is wonderful...keep pushing...
     
  7. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hmmmm..pt.2 huh? i'll think about it....lol..thanks for droppin by to read me...glad u enjoyed it...
    :heart:
    -story
     
  8. MrAdams

    MrAdams Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    re: hi

    good-afternoon the_story ,


    just had to check out one of your new pieces before logging off...


    Read below:



    there you go again sister... oh yes, you have definitely stepped to the plate and blessed us with another MASTERPIECE... one does have to read line for line for to fully take in this poem... do post PART 2 soon sister, as everyone is feeling your work... ( aka... poetry )


    have a nice day...


    sincerely,
    c.t.adams-///
     
  9. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lol..no doubt of course i'll do a pt.2, i'm working on it now...thanks for feelin me
    :heart:
    -story
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...girl
    there is just something about
    the way you construct *descriptive* words...
    you never cease to amaze me...
    and I will never cease to tell you...

    loving your craft...
     
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