Black Poetry : U & I

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by caramelpython, Dec 7, 2004.

  1. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hot: ​

    Enticing stride,
    Alluring smile,
    Beautiful profile,
    It was clear that I was digging your style,
    Sensual, Seductive voice tone felt like home,
    Verbal stimulation an invite to mental penetration,
    Conversation x-rated and yet, no sexual verbiage,
    No doubt, I prefer this,
    Eyes being the door to the soul,
    There’s a greater need to walk the corridors,
    Yup, I needed more,

    The sway of those hips,
    The way she licked those lips,
    Had a brother wanting to skinny dip,
    And plant seeds in fertile soil,
    That’s rite, for once in life someone to spoil,

    Heat increasing and contact would reveal the depth of what I feel,
    Out of respect I’m going to ask,
    Surely up for the task,
    For she wants as much I want that
    Must get past this lustful crave,
    And truth is it may never fade,
    Moreover, if it’s on a need to know basis,

    Then, tell me today,
    My promise, to never stray,
    Unless that dive we take together for pleasure,
    ends before our season even brings us together.


    :bye:
     
  2. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Alluring piece my brother...
    you captured the feeling of falling
    in love so perfectly in this
    particularly...the anticipation
    and questions of the unknown
    I adored the last two lines...

    Unless that dive we take together for pleasure,
    ends before our season even brings us together.

    it was bittersweet, leaving me wishing
    and crossing my fingers that, that season
    lasts forever...

    Beautiful work python!
    Sage
     
  3. Khasm13

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    this was an intense piece bruh...
    verbal and mental intercourse...i can dig it...word
    one love
    khasm
     
  4. peach_so_sweet

    peach_so_sweet Active Member MEMBER

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    Brotha you are definitly on point. I love the beginning of this poem. It brings back pleasant memories. :luvv: :lips: :lips: :luvv: :lips: :lips: :luvv:
     
  5. IntuitioninMD

    IntuitioninMD Banned MEMBER

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    I love this....

    What I love most... is the ORDER OF THE EVENTS?
    The attraction.
    The conversation.
    The lust.
    and ultimately the decision to truly love.....

    this has to be from experience... :)

    this is very beautiful.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    brutha this was awesomely hot like peppers
    keep droppin it
     
  7. deepy

    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    in your other poem, the first stanza wrapped me up
    and in this one...the last stanza tied me..
    these two poems i read of yours today are
    really wonderful..
    either i've missed something or the creative energies you are riding on have taken you to another, higher place..
    very nice
     
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    awesome flowing very interesting...loved the flow
     
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    I suppose what struck me the most about this one, was what was particularly captured in the last stanza...all of these feelings are held, yet there is the total uncertainty of it all. Flow on, that pen of your is smokin.
     
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    My personal favorite line....

    so subtle and yet so strong :read:

    brotha this is jes *chills* lovely :)

    words cannot describe