Black Poetry : u got it all wrong

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by hi-wa, Jan 4, 2002.

  1. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    picture a torn dejected soul
    a man with dirty rags sprawled across his
    body/4 weeks old
    stingent smell pierces your nose with
    in-hal-a-tion and frustration plagues u and other passers-by
    that notice his rotation
    u think he's a beggar
    but he knows from whence he came
    sole aim in life to provide for his family but hasn't
    pleased his own apetite in a week;
    but used to his current state nonetheless
    meek
    willing to help anyBODY that passes his feet
    (hanging out of his shoes by the way)
    picture this man and all of his qualities
    characteristics that plague his mindstate
    words that almost swallow me....................


    now picture him white!



    yo, this is not a racial poem at all, but it is geared to let ya'll know the stigma put on brothas by othas and how the media has portrayed a lot of us over the years. i can't take all the credit for this one, but whomever the poet is that inspired me to compose my version of it.........mUch luv.
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi-Wa.


    well done, poet!! serious-ly poignant piece...

    & i have to admit... that last line... had me
    blinking... thinking... adjusting my mental
    image of the man in your piece... & i'm a
    sistah... so i think i need to evaluate my
    "conditioning"... thank you for opening my
    mental this mornin'... :)

    AlwaysAlwaysPeace.
    SunShyne~
     
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    Picture framed.

    It is a shame how the world became
    so cold through the eyes of man.
    God bless you brotha.
    Thanks for the read.
    Peace.:toast:
     
  4. hi-wa

    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx sunshine for takin time.
    rashad, pree-shate u too.

    i hope u got the message as i did. the concept really blew
    me.

    keep hittin the hi-wa.
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm Loosin it!

    I coulda swore I hit this last night... Definitely a thought producer! Keep em' comin

    Madd Respect
    Reas
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    super sweet how u displayed da reality of man
    even if it's painful ........very very nice work poet!:D
     
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    hi-wa Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    reas...... thanks for your read. i was inspired by an email i got some time ago, and just found the piece to put it on the post.

    rich...... thanx also. sometimes i drift off and don't know where my words will end up.

    much luv fellas.

    hw
     
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    as a writter a poet

    wordz flow in and out sometime we just move
    wit pen in hand and look what come to canvas

    see what u did!!!
    A MASTERPIECE OF REALITY
    Thank u.........hi~wa:toast:
     
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    Hi-wa

    Thought provoking piece. I love poetry that drives your mind in one direction, then suddenly make a sharp turn. It's mind thrilling. Thanks for sharing.

    Madd Sistahly Love
    CCBSKYN :heart:
     
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    fear
    and fear of the truth
    is a terrible thing
    man
    feeling
    the depth of your work

    DSSNY
     
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