Black Poetry : Twisted.....

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by MzBlkAngel, Apr 2, 2005.

  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Twisted in the wind
    Like a wild flower
    Stirring trying to find my way
    Through the fog
    No where to turn no where to go
    Twisted emotions
    Do I stay or do I go
    Are we over
    Did you forget to tell me?
    Blind and have no clue
    You came down from the blue
    I wasn’t looking
    And you step in
    And turned my world
    Upside down
    Upside down
    I don’t know what to do
    Twisted inside
    Lost and wondering
    Wish I was the wind
    I could sail until the pain go away
    I be in heaven forever
    Upon the clouds
    For the vision once was is not
    Clouds cover
    The fog smothers
    Twisted
    Twisted
    So lost in your world

    (C) 2005
    untitled life
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Such piercing words, the emotion in this piece sounds unbearable. Pen on fire I see. Flow on then.
     
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    AHMOSE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The writer writes with their pen on their shoulder drawing the reader deeper and deeper into the pain thats being expressed in this piece. Another good drop Angel.
     
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    PoeticManifesta Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl, you ain; neva lied! lol.. im twisted like Keith Sweat.. great scribe.. I hate that feeling of uncertainity that resides when nothing.. turns to something!
     
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    twist effects of what is can be deep
    i hear ya on dis one
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Captivating, and the ending is straight up hot.
     
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    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Very head on piece,
    Nice drop sis
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you all for the love
     
  9. Legendof_1_Spirit

    Legendof_1_Spirit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Deeply feeling this

    <fades in>

    U really worked those words on this piece poet! I was drawn into your world and moved by your empassioned expression. I tip my locs to U.

    keep the words moving

    <fades out>
     
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    peace,

    The picture painted here leaves one speechless..............

    "Twisted in the wind
    Like a wild flower
    Stirring trying to find my way
    Through the fog"

    :bowdown:

    peace
     
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