Black Poetry : Twisted

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by hisili, Nov 22, 2004.

  1. hisili

    hisili Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You thought he loved you
    he didn't even know you
    he knew you were fine as hell
    his soul he would sell
    just to take your cherry
    he lied, said you he would marry
    now he's done his deed
    and for you he has no need.

    Nothing but tears and prayers asking why....
    pour your soul to me saying you want to die

    But you have no idea how twisted I was
    feelings of sorrow for u and glee for me cuz
    I knew I loved you so much more
    had feelings for you from deep within my core
    always wanting this, but not to hurt you
    and swear when your mine I will be true.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    twisted affects of love flowing deep inside where true love reside feelin dis scribe
     
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    this si a nice scribe of true feelings enjoyed it
     
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    Wow...I love the way
    this piece gives you the
    feeling of being right inside
    of the persons mind...as if
    the reader were thinking
    those thoughts him or herself...

    This was truly heartfelt...
    truly...

    Loved this immensly...
    Sage
     
  5. hisili

    hisili Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    although I feel I had to cut this short im glad yall appreciated it, when I find tha notebook I originally wrote this down on I might edit it to itz full length,..... think Dr. K may be grading that folder, but I still luv tha luv.
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The "lust" that we sometimes cling to is amazing...
    while love sits hopelessly...needlessly blazing.
    wonderful piece, and keep reaching for the love.
     
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    :fyi: Short but the message was on point! I enjoyed this flow and the feelings were true!
     
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    naujae Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like this it's very emotional
    or maybe I'm just very emotional today
     
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    HODEE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is very nice. Twisted is a great flow. I have been on the outside waiting while my love went off with another. Only to be hurt and of course I was there to help her recover. After she felt better, :getout: she left me again. I love her so much we will always be friends. Sometimes I feel like a revolving door. She is special.. I am her core.

    This is why she loves me, she is exploring the world. I know one day I hope it isn't long :time: she really becomes my girl.
     
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