Black Poetry : turbulent* (alliteration)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thepoetsean, Jul 23, 2001.

  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *people shock me.

    11.03 pm


    things turn--
    tornado-like
    twistingly tredding through
    thoughts that trap the
    time i'd like to take--
    yet
    *trickery is this life*

    sean stays stubborn--
    standing still where
    most see **** stir and set
    making sour situations
    that be searing some subtle savagery--
    *and suddenly son shynes shock*
    partly because people push
    clouds of confusion through
    perplexed purple-pulped mind--
    color changed because i'm head abused--
    pushin' thought against thought
    to not-so-pleasurable-points that pend pollution
    to where thinking hurts--

    it seems i birthed the world and bear the consequences...

    and i'm

    *pheeling phases of postpartum pressing*

    [and the world still spins.]


    sean.
     
  2. Da Street So'ja

    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    fo' real doe

    stop thinking so hard
    keep it simple dawg
    it's all about the money game
    then everything else falls in place

    stay strong soldier

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  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    I GOTTA

    AGREE WIT DA SO'JA MAN FO SHO
    TRUELY IT WILL FALL IN PLACE :toast:
     
  4. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sean, now, you know that i thrive off of yo word usage! i'm feelin' this piece b/c it's tyght. oh, yeah, and i agree wit so'ja man and richness.

    ~~~inkdrops~~~
     
  5. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like a bro who can "alliterate" to write like this takes work because every word has to count to make it all come together. It reminds me of a piece I wrote. I'll have to find it and post it. This here is a solid TEN!

    blak
     
  6. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sean,

    Missed it but it's on like that!!!!

    :peace:
    GQ