Black Poetry : trying to shine

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by thespokesman, Mar 14, 2004.

  1. thespokesman

    thespokesman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m just trying to shine
    Hoping I can see the light off a dime
    Feeling high
    Watching time past by

    All this time
    I been trying to shine
    Tryin to figure out
    Life and how beats go
    How everything plays out
    And if life what wishes were
    How precious would it be
    Then you would feel both u and me

    All wishes I had
    And those fulfilled
    I look back at my w-2
    And its like funds depleted
    As if I got paid and somebody, scratched 0’s
    Still trying to get to it and figure it out

    I’m just trying to live,
    Get a lil piece of steak fillet
    Instead of chic fil- a
    That’s what I get today
    I work in grocery
    So I eat what expires
    I barely got enough to chunk a five tithe
    Hoping that will keep me alive

    With false faith
    I almost know my fate if I touch the gate
    I been in brush with death
    You have too
    Everytime u turn a light, dial a phone
    U stepped in your car assuming you’ll make it home
    In the event of all this, I just drive by
    And look in my rear view
    Not knowing what lies miles ahead
    And I’m just trying to steer thru

    And I ain’t seen the end yet
    Yet they tell me it’s construction
    But if I engineer
    And design my structure right it’ll make things clear

    I’m just trying to shine
    Hoping I can see the light off a dime
    Feeling high
    Watching time past by
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm feeling this, just trying to do your best, as others are, not knowing what the next minute holds for sure. I really liked the way you posed this, keep flowing.
     
  3. twision

    twision Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I like the way this was posted as well. Lotta truth and mind food. Very nice!

    Peace and Love
     
  4. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dang, I am feelin this. really love the way you put it together, bro.
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    likes the way u posed this
    nice drop
    flow on.....
    Angel
     
  6. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man this was str8 awesome
    love how it was done too wow!!
    u shinning bright here
    got my shades on !
     
  7. Royal_T

    Royal_T Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In my opinion....you're shining right now.....sweet!!!!
     
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