Poetry Critiques : Truth or Dare

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  1. carsonh

    carsonh Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :kiss2: Truth or Dare

    I dare you to intamcy,
    the one thing that scares you,
    the one thing that breaks you.
    I want you to come close to me
    and tell me you need me
    and I want you to let me
    hold you and never let go.

    I dare you to spontaneity,
    because its not controlled by you
    and there is no plan for what we do.
    Put down the schedule and let down your hair,
    take off your watch and put it anywhere,
    now atke off your worries and fear,
    release every care.

    I dare you to fantasy.
    That will bring the child out of you,
    and with it your desires true.
    Close your eyes and beging to dream,
    welcome to where things are not what they seem,
    looks like no where you have ever seen,
    and feels like no place you have ever been.

    I dare you to romance.
    I will guide you,
    do not be afraid I am here with you.
    Allow me to charm,
    bring you roses and carry you on my arm,
    give you my jacket to keep you warm.
    Walk with me and feel safe from harm.

    I dare you to love me,
    because, truth is, I love you.:kiss2:
     
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    To allow oneself to be vulnerable to another, scary, yes, but with the right person, oh the joys it can bring. This was sweeter than sweet, your special someone is quite lucky. What an endearing scribe.
     
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    I love the way that you ended this poem with one "truth".. love.. one simple truth, but yet so complex. Way to grasp emotions.... I'm feeling this!
     
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    truth and to dare
    wit such grace is joyful
    but if twisted can be scary

    this was well laid out to canvas poet !
     
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    thanks for the responses and thoughts, they are very much appreciated as usual.
    bless
     
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    just keep doing you and keep hittin da right keys for i see da book ahead you on your way
    your creative is grand
     
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    many blessings family.
     
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    likewise unto you carsonh
     
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