Black Poetry : trulytaken...

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  1. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I’m
    famished
    from the deepest sacredness
    of me I want to be
    taken

    cocked
    is my curiosity
    to be filled to the fullness of his
    e x t e n s i o n

    to him…

    I
    mention
    with my eyes and
    the pressing together of
    thirsty thighs every time he passes by

    “I WANT YOU!”

    but…
    somehow
    its lost in translation
    leaving me at the mercy of fantasies
    where…
    his kisses
    incite reckless abandon
    inhibitions are set free in the wind
    drifting far into the
    distance

    gone… gone… gone…

    I
    can’t
    distinguish
    right from wrong
    I’m not certain I even want to
    with…
    ‘NEEDING IT’
    so **** bad on its hands and knees
    pleading

    please… please… give in

    to him

    my
    body is in acute
    submission
    I

    am

    open
    ENTIRELY
    to everything he has to give

    I
    recognize
    heat in his touch
    my insides scream “take me, truly… please!”
    every sense of me
    sense
    its
    only
    a matter of time
    before he descends from
    my earlobes
    to
    my
    neck
    to
    my
    breasts
    to
    my
    navel
    to
    enchanting
    folds that embrace us in
    ecstasy…
    slowly-sinking-intensely
    into …
    truly
    taken...


    feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
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    4EVERLUV Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    coco:
    I'm calln' yo mama on you...lol
    Guuuurrrllll....this joint is
    stifilingly, sweltering,
    HOTT.
    It reminded me of a scibe I wrote
    but never posted it here. Bcuz
    it was so HOTT, I might have to rethink that.
    You know I'm feeln' this fiyah!!!:flame:

    Much Luv & Peace

    ~4EVER
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Oh my, Lard....SISTER COCO!


    (lol) Gurrl, is err-thang aiight over yonder?!


    Wait.....Scratch that.....That was a STUPID question. :lol:

    NO, everything is NOT alright!

    But, I do hope that SOON AND VERY SOON you get "TRULY TAKEN!"

    Whoodie-Hoo!

    This was anotha futha kinda STEAMY INFERNO OF EROTIC! :bowdown:

    Gurrl, you had me talkin' out loud!..."Oooh, Oh my!...WELL!...al-righty-then!"

    My goodness, you did tha dang thang!

    Actually, whoever this Brother is, he's in TROUBLE! :lol:
     
  4. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hey 4Ever...

    There was a poem of yours(on a different site) that I believe watz responded to that included the words ‘truly taken’ and from those beautiful words this piece was created. So I guess in a way you both inspired this piece. It made me think about the incredible-overwhelming feeling of being taken, oh so properly. That’s a hot thought, huh? Oh and about my moms, lets leave her out of this. LOL!

    CherryB, Your comment gave me a good laugh. Sista I'm a'ight. :) Sometimes we get filled with "steamy" inspiration and a piece just comes out(using 4Ever's word) "hot".

    Thank you both for reading and commenting. I appreciate your feedback its nourishment for growth.

    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    Peace coco:
    Oh Wow!!!!! I inspired someone....thats waay cool. I'm the one that is always being inspired by someone else. I guess what queentswana said is true. You never know how your words can touch someone else. Well, I am so glad that it was you....because I know whatever you pen is always a great write and a beautiful expression of words. You go head on girl....

    P.S. Okay...I won't tell on you THIS times:donttell: lol

    Much Luv & Peace,

    ~4EVER
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whewwwwww!!!
    for da takens this was hot had me taken inside like a child
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sir Richnees, when it comes to flowin' "hot" I learned from the best, 'The Destee Xtreme Team" And I thank you.

    4Ever, Thank you for the kind words... they are oh so mutual! And thanks for not rattin' me out:)

    Thanks for coming through. Its appreciated BIGTIME!:)



    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    Sister dear...

    the sensuality in this piece
    is like whoa!!!

    so much left to the imagination

    a sistah need a fan

    right bout now...

    just to fan away
    them spicy thoughts.


    [email protected], we gon keep dis one a secret...:em2300:


    you done outdided yourself with this one heah! :toast:



    epiphany:heart:


     
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    from being "Loved...like that"

    to being loved like...that. i see i'm going to have to take some LOVED LIKE classes...just to keep up with how a woman supposed to be LOVED LIKE.:) the river courses through you...and your pen tell its tale. nicely done.
     
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    nice... love the rhythm of this.. the economy, the voice, the presentation.. beautifully done.