Black Poetry : True love

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by merck, Jul 1, 2005.

  1. merck

    merck Member MEMBER

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    Never neglect those who care. I learned the hard way, but I want to share.

    Alizah, that was her name, I will never forget you, my life isn't the same/
    Withought you here, catchin your tears, in your darkest hour and greatest fear/
    Like a fool I left U for over 2 years, the woman I was with wouldn't let me hear/
    The truth was there, but love is blind, when you were diagnosed with cancer/
    quickly changed my life, I realized how much you meant to me/
    Alizah untill my time is up I am truelly sorry/I know you've heard me say it/
    Time and time again, I know I was with you untill your life came to an end/
    But I never had the chance to say I loved you, now it's too late, what am I to do?
    I think about you every waking day, wondering I hope now all is okay/
    You are my best friend, though the physical had to end, sometimes I think I feel your hand/
    Touching me softly to say "It's okay, I'm here baby, no need to be afraid/
    I know how much I mean/how every night you hope to dream of me"/
    Alizah you will never be forgotten/you have a soul that would illuminate all of heaven.

    Alizah was my best female friend, she passed away at the age of 25 in dec of last year. She was diagnosed with a deadly form of stomach cancer.

    R.I.P Baby your always in my heart
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hi merck, and welcome to the right spot, glad to have you aboard.
    this is a awesome piece poet, yet I too felt the pain in it.
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very deeply felt as the pain of it rivers down
    flow on express........................................
     
  4. DestinyLove222

    DestinyLove222 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I feel your pain. Your piece is very touching and hearfelt.
     
  5. Prince Yakeem

    Prince Yakeem Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man each line was hitting me hard I too lost a female friend ( rest in peace Brandy). And might lose another one soon...great work!!
     
  6. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    awesome piece thanks for sharing your feelings

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    Auroraflower Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Welcome merck .....


    this was touching..


    treu emotions on paper.....



    yes...








    we have to live in the moment now and say how we feel...


    cause we never know how long our loved ones will be here...







    much strength to you..
    and she will be an angel watching over you...






    LoveAuroraflower:heart:
     
  8. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was quite touching. Thanks for reminding us to cherish those we have, because sometimes our time with them is cut short.
     
  9. Tha-Emissary

    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sorry about your loss bru. I think you get your point across well and I believe people will gain something from your piece.
     
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