Black Poetry : True Jewels

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The treasure chest, opened
    The luster of the jewels, blinding
    simply, brilliant. As I struggle to see
    within 20/20, I am finding
    that the luster has caused liquid
    crystals to form in my eyes
    and I don't try to keep them open any
    more, recognizing these impassioned cries

    I just...let it happen
    The crystal droplets began to pour,
    such priceless gifts of warmth and acceptance
    emerging from the bottom of the ocean floor
    A lost treasure, I have found
    I allow the rapture to capture
    Saturating me within his golden spirit
    my hushed tones are silent
    yet somehow I feel he can hear it

    We have gone beyond time
    we have transcended the sublime
    Enlightened by this glory,
    all the while
    discovering
    we are jewels of the Nile
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Never ending beauty
    where such delightful
    gems connect un-bound-ly
    cascading in da crystalize
    sea where only he can hear
    thee silent whispers

    This was so deepen and beautiful my heart went into a sweet hush and awe !

    I truely and warmly loved this piece one i will continue to visit and read .
    WOW !!!!
     
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    Gee, to know that my words left such an impression upon you... I'm humbled, and I thank you so much, Rich. :)
     
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    Here i am again back to live inside da warm hush and get this feeling
    yes sista u took me and i can't let go i want more .......give me more !
     
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    You want more? Okay then brotha, more is on its way...
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    give praise

    sista hearing you loud and clear

    time to respect the power

    one
     
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    I like the title, True jewels. Fits really well with the poem. And I liked how you described your tears.

    Lovely read, sistah

    Thanks

    D.S.
     
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    watz:
    This read like a beautiful story.


    We have gone beyond time
    we have transcended the sublime
    Enlightened by this glory,
    all the while
    discovering
    we are jewels of the Nile


    The ending is my favorite part. Poetic-Beauty

    Much Luv
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Have to respect that power, So'ja, thank you brotha.
    Thank you Desert Storm, glad you liked the title and how tears were described, much appreciated.
    You especially liked the ending? Why thank you 4everluv, that was so kind of you.
     
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