Black Poetry : trouble (Pt.3 of the LOVE trilogy)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by the_story, Feb 24, 2004.

  1. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my mind was trippin,
    i couldn't think,
    couldn't breath,
    i was lost,
    slippin between deminsions that
    digested into my soul,
    it was cold...
    i lay bare on naked sheets
    waiting for dawn to come
    and take me away
    or for the galaxies to decend
    into my arms just to be warmed by my heartbeat...

    i cryed to the heavens ( :help: )
    for a way to take away
    the life that was pulsating
    in my belly,
    wondering how this could have happened,

    i touch my stomack and feel detached
    spinning...
    spinning...
    spinning...
    d
    o
    w
    n

    (he said he loved me)
    then why is this...
    its his too!!

    Lord help me.....

    to be continued...

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  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    alright storyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!
    let the ink run sistah
    coz dis on point
     
  3. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks brotah rich,
    much :heart:
    -story
     
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    wow sister
    had to go back to
    1 and 2
    flow onward
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
  5. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for the luv bluwater, i appreciate it.
    much :heart:,
    -story
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed most welcome sistah
    pt.4 please i have enjoyed
    every one and the greatness
    of emotions pouring out
    flow on gurl !!!!
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow this was nice
    waiting on pt 4
    flow my sister
     
  8. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i'm glad yall liked working on part four as we speak...
    much :heart:
    -story
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    still amazing me...

    wow...you really
    took me on a mental and
    deeply emotional journey with
    this one...

    I've never read anyone write
    about this subject the way
    that you have...

    Love your style... :spinstar: Praise :spinstar:
     
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    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks sage, Glad u liked it...
    much love,
    -story
     
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