Black Poetry : Troubl'd Watahs

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  1. epiphany

    epiphany Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Troubl'd watahs...

    flo'n hyeah
    min' a daz'd
    'fraid an' a ha'z
    no mo laffah
    troubl'n state
    pik'n cott'n
    at dawn's first light

    backs a hu'tn
    no end n sight
    feel'n blu's
    I's sing'n dem
    ol' gosp'l hymns

    mah mammy's gon'
    mastah sol' huh
    lak ol' sho's
    chillun tuk'n
    we'n deys bo'n

    mastah hid'n
    f'om his miss'is
    snek'n n' mah qua'ters
    late n' da night
    tek'n somep'n
    dat ain' his ta git'

    hus'bn bea'tn
    hang'd n' bu'n
    tryin' ta scape
    ta da no'th
    say'd he sen' fu' me
    fu' da time was sho't

    troubl'd watahs

    I's mit'e tiahed
    I prays each night
    fu' da shrenf ta fight
    ol' lawd.....dis watahs
    pur'dy deep.......

    save mah soul
    evah'day I's weep
    ta bring's me peace
    so's I kin sleep


    Epiphany(c)2001
     
  2. Heartbeat

    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bravo!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yessss beautiful

    surely peace will be and rest will come upon u
    coz ya heart and mind feel the motion flow
    u write dem wordz sistah Queen Epiphany...:D :heart:
     
  4. YeshuJah

    YeshuJah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Interesting.

    This is not a style that is often seen, and it can be quite difficult to write since you're trying to capture a voice perhaps never heard. I think you did a pretty good job telling it. Heads up.
     
  5. epiphany

    epiphany Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanx Heartbeat....

    For the very encouraging word...
    I appreciate your read....

    Epiphany :heart:
     
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    epiphany Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    $RICH$...Thankya..

    I appreciate your words of
    encouragement, and the read...

    Epiphany :heart:
     
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    epiphany Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeshujah....

    Thank you, I just imagined what it would have
    been like back then, we all have a connection
    spiritually, so it wasn't really difficult to do....
    I have done a lot of reading on slave experiences...
    I also can trace my roots back to the beginning...
    it has been a family tradition...

    Epiphany :heart:
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    smile'n

    ...with the flow
    not at the circumstance that were too horrifying to mention
    you did justice by a terrible injustice
    love the way you laid it.

    let the river flow.
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Definitely

    A joynt heavily accented... I dig the way you put it down dear!

    Madd Respect
    Reas
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Impressive

    I had to read this more than once to get the flo of it. Then it became spoken......you are movin to higher ground. This was a very good and challenging read.

    Madd Holiday Greetings :heart:
    CCBSKYN