Black Poetry : trippin'

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  1. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i say that he's my
    friend
    he says
    i'm his friend too
    but when we get together
    we don't do the things friends
    are supposed to do
    my heart is torn in two
    everytime i ask
    what am i to you
    i dream about him
    when i'm in my bed
    at night
    think about him endlessly
    in the daylight
    it's like a full moon
    hanging over me
    constantly
    asking why can't i see
    its light
    confusion
    ain't my thing
    so why do i seek
    so desperately the answer
    to this conundrum that
    every new day brings
    the way he kisses me
    on my neck
    rubs my back
    makes love to me
    like i belong
    in the sky as a star
    making me high enough
    to almost get there
    i say that he's a friend
    of mine
    wondering if i could
    be telling
    lies
    he says that i'm his friend
    too
    what are friends supposed
    to do
    sometimes i cry
    when i think we're close
    the truth lies behind
    the walls
    we've built
    just in case the whole
    world falls
    into some kind of crazy
    i can't define what i feel
    just know
    my imagination grinds to
    a stand still
    when his lips touch mine
    can friends be lovers
    can lovers ever be friends
    not sure where we're going
    but he is just
    a friend
    right
     
  2. MrBlak

    MrBlak Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice flow toylin....you seem to be going thru a roller coaster of emotions in this piece....you get that across well.

    Nice job
     
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    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dang gurl
    my heart stoped as i was reading this
    how it brought back memories of thinking of wat "we" is
    friends?
    u captured that emotion of somin feeling good, needed, heartfelt but unanswered - the feeling that comes wit jus being "friends"
    gracias sistah
     
  4. toylin

    toylin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    They say experience is the best teacher....... I'll leave it for you to draw your own conclusions........
     
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    You painted this tangle very well, toylin. Great drop.
     
  6. sarcasm4eva

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    I've been there, so lets trip 2gether

    Tired of fighting what I feel,
    I told u the deal.
    Fu%^ed up circumstances,
    Taking away our chance at bein
    Real
    Constantly thinking about u.
    Got me doing sh~t I wouldnt normally do.
    I think I'm addicted to u.
    Friends and Lovers?
    Lovers and Friends?
    We cant co-exist,
    So I just put up w/this sh%!.
    Telling u I love u,
    Cuz ur the one I always miss.
    Silently waiting for another kiss.
    I need u to make me forget all this.


    see what u made me do.lol. def. a tyte scribe i can relate more than i care to admit. much love :)
     
  7. poetic_diva

    poetic_diva Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THIS TIGHT FLOW JUST GOES TO SHOW JUST HOW COMPLICATED LIFE CAN BE. MUCH LOVE, MANY BLESSING. PEACE.

    POETIC_DIVA


    "I CAN DO ALL THINGS THROUGH CHRIST, WHICH STRENGTHENS ME" PHILP 4:13
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaaa!!! now this one took me somewhere
    u shot this one out wit flame
     
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    that is a real tight piece, keep on keepin on. i feel you, u put that feelin' to words PERFECTLY...im luvin' it...
     
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    Loved this piece! Been there but for me it didn't work out but we still remain close a little too close considering I'm married and that my husband has not one problem with us still being friends....what can I say they both love me.
    Great piece you keep on writing!
     
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