Poetry Critiques : trees

daroc

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i was on the bus back to college staring out the window at all the dead trees
and this is what came to mind....

what is a dead tree?
for every
is there one lost soul
for every
they kill for us
knock down to use for us
is there a life
that dies with it?
are we
trees....
swaying in the wind
waiting for sunshine
to be let in
and brighten our lives
in dreary days of distress
or
enjoying winter
because
we get to shed our leaves
past memories
to start over
in a new year
new season
are we
trees...
what is a dead tree?
limp
leaning
looking for help
how is that
any different from me?
 
daroc said:
i was on the bus back to college staring out the window at all the dead trees
and this is what came to mind....

what is a dead tree?
for every
is there one lost soul
for every
they kill for us
knock down to use for us
is there a life
that dies with it?
are we
trees....
swaying in the wind
waiting for sunshine
to be let in
and brighten our lives
in dreary days of distress
or
enjoying winter
because
we get to shed our leaves
past memories
to start over
in a new year
new season
are we
trees...
what is a dead tree?
limp
leaning
looking for help
how is that
any different from me?

This is deep Darac

for every
is there one lost soul
for every
they kill for us
knock down to use for us



for every tree
is there one lost soul
for every tree
they kill for use
knock down to use for us

Other wise this is a great poem. I like the Parallels. This makes the reader think. Trees do have rings that correspond to events in life. There is a science that studies this and they have charted events in history to tree rings. You can also tell how old a tree is by it's rings. Rings are the center of the tree, working their way to the edge. We are like trees. :smokin:

Like the threads in the quilt man weaves , the threads are black and gold. The rings of a tree has to a story to be told.

Side note for ya! No bearing on this flow. ( have you signed up and seen the book info? Come on in we are ready.)
 
i like this and it's meanings for the life of a tree
i agree on the part or it could have stated

( for every one
is like a lost soul
for every tree
they kill for us
is knocking the use of us )

Many trees have a history and a life story
what lay at the bark of a tree is untold but
by destoring it kills life this was a gem ...
 

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