Black Poetry : ...traversed...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LiLi, Nov 5, 2002.

  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    crimson and amber
    burst
    as you skim my thigh
    sweetly
    pleasure so intense it
    hurts
    fingers arrest nipples
    briefly
    lovers words i
    curse
    kiss lips so
    gently
    as you enter in slowly
    first
    i beg for this
    softly
    body shudders of
    thirst
    desire's overwhelming
    mostly
    before you ever stroke my
    curves
    man's breath felt
    closely...

    moves pensive
    observed
    fantasy's hightened
    ghostly
    white to blue flame
    submersed
    syncopation found
    freely
    honey cream springs flesh
    alert
    eyes close
    chastely
    body thrust
    terse
    hands grip
    tightly
    bodies resolve...

    traversed
    .
    .
    .


    2002 ALL ME
     
  2. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    smooooth-ly erotic... & i was feelin' it, chile. :)
    imma go read it again... the imagery was all
    that!! thank ya!!

    itsallLove, hun. :wink:

    elayne.
     
  3. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i dont know if you like my writting or not, so i dont mean to offend you but the way you write somehow reminds me of my own style

    i really like this

    i like the way you break up the lines reminds me of what i
    would do with a poem like this

    dont get me wrong i dont like it cause it reminds me of
    my writing i like it because it is a good poem

    kepp um comin lili
     
  4. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LiLi,

    Niiiiiiiiiiice!!!!

    :heart:
    GQ
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    bodies...traversed, indeed.:)

    beautifully scripted.

    THANK YOU.
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    girl I walked all through this here

    and was diggin the scene. Go on Ms. Lili





    One
     
  7. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AWWWW...THANK YOU!!

    ms. elayne. ~ you read it again??! i love that. thank you for stoppin in!!

    lonelypoet ~ offended??? absolutely not!! never that, hun. i only got love for ya! i very much appreciate your words!

    GQ ~ thank ya kind sir!!

    baller ~ indeed. thank you!

    Lady UbZoRbShUn ~ aint nothin wrong with a little stroll... thank you ever so kindly for passin thru!!
     
  8. Reason

    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    LiLi

    This was almost enuff to melt my mental... lovin the flow slim!

    Alwayz
    Reas
     
  9. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WHOA!

    (andi'llleaveitatthat!!!)
     
  10. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    daaaaaaaaaang... i need to send this to my husband! :spinstar: