Black Poetry : Trapped

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  1. 7thPoet

    7thPoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was written for someone special with hopes that they pull through this with as little friction as possible...I care...

    TRAPPEDIn a web of untruths and deceit
    Playing a fruitless game of denial
    as if my eyes lied…

    Trapped
    Caught under an avalanche
    of useless gifts and perverted truths…

    Ensnared by your obstinate refusal to face it
    It is over…The showering of offerings which once were sweet
    have become cloying tainted useless trinkets
    tarnished by you infidelity…

    Treed
    with no way to descend down the branches
    of broken promises and leaves of disappointment…

    Pinned down under a cornucopia of faithlessness disloyalty and betrayal
    as if my eyes lied…

    Entangled and knotted forever umbilically
    by the ONE GOOD LIFE we did produce…

    Immovable and fixed as you believe yourself to be
    I need you, only, to set me free
    for I am
    Cornered as a wounded mammal
    protecting its young

    If Caged birds really do sing
    this one lost its melody

    I need my wings
    wings you Clipped with your faithless adulterous treachery

    Please open the snare
    of your
    Trap
    it is over!!!!!!!
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    HEY 7TH man u really out did ya self on this one
    awesome flowing brutha
     
  3. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    loving this write
    your style wheeew!!!!
    love it!!!
     
  4. n2words

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    As an appreciator of words I must say that you my brother can turn a metaphor.
    This was a painful and vindictive poem at the same time. :argue:
    I'm not sure if that's what you were going for, but you got it nevertheless.
     
  5. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are an amazing poet...

    This peace stirred tears in my soul… :crying:
    Somehow I sense she knows and feels
    Your empathic spirit beside her…
    How else could you scribe such an intrinsic peace
    Unless connected…
    She is immensely blessed to have you
    As her Friend and Confidant.

    She knows… :heart: :grouphug: :heart:



    00000000000000
     
  6. PropheticNsyght

    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hmmmm Hmmm this is truly delicious!!!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes it is difficult to end something even when you know not only is it best, but it was over long ago. I am sure the one whom this was intended for appreciates this very much. It felt like it was from the heart.
     
  8. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I just kept readin and goin yep, yep, yep. This is the real deal, my brothah.
     
  9. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was a wonderful and straight to the point piece, so sad when "two" ...don't share the same values and views.
     
  10. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    i feel trapped no dun....
    your way with words is truly a gift...
    keep shine'n
    one love
    khasm
     
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