Black Poetry : ...trapped...

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  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am completely at a loss for
    …words
    at this moment
    I’ve got a satchel full of heartfelt scribes
    written in my own blood
    brought on by
    …love
    …hate
    …weakness
    …sadness
    …loneliness
    …soulness
    …soul
    …my soul
    My soul is feeling tired today
    Those that I love seem to have
    …lost their way
    …away
    …along the way
    Following that path they thought
    …redemption
    Redemption
    …what?
    Blvd
    Road
    Lane
    Alley
    Lost in the alley
    Trapped within the
    ...cold
    ...wet
    ...cement
    and
    ...brick
    Trapped…


    2002 ALLME
     
  2. Ladysoul

    Ladysoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "I am completely at a loss for
    …words
    at this moment
    I’ve got a satchel full of heartfelt scribes
    written in my own blood"

    I like this a lot; it really touched me. I read it twice and slow to let all of what you are saying really sink in. Nice opening.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dis was deep yet understandable
    indeed u touching souls today....
     
  4. Lady2complexx

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    This was a heartfelt peice......It seem like i was the writer it also felt like I was the one whom this was being written about.......Excellent peice and the format in the way it was written seem to have given depth to the words.....Keep doing your thing and stay up and no doubt be blessed
     
  5. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    GOOD MORNING!

    Ladysoul ~ thank you! i'm glad that you took your time w/it...after i posted it i wondered if it would come across kinda frivlous or distorted...thanks again!!

    Super-RICH-ness ~ glad that it touched you luv! thank you for your reply!

    Lady2complexx ~ your comment is very much appreciated! thank you!
     
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