Black Poetry : Trains Don’t Come They Arrive

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  1. PatriceCQueen

    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He said this with the greatest flirtation
    I played along cause his locks were smart and solid
    Resembling a long lost protector
    He spoke as his dark complexion told another tale
    His words came as a storyteller
    Blending English and urban subway legends

    I did not want to interrupt him
    His Trinidadian twang hypnotic
    While he talked about giant mice in the subways
    Standing on hind legs and becoming regal monsters
    We traded words while watching a young mouse
    Holding his ground as the train arrived into the station

    He morphed back into a stranger
    As he boarded the train
    Beautiful to look at
    I watched him sitting in his jean jacket
    Sporting matching pants
    While working on his Soduku puzzle

    I wondered what he deferred
    To become American
    Living in New York
    Marking each day
    So the bills are paid

    In a world where less and less we woo Goddess
    Dream of making a mark in the universe
    Men pacing small steps preferring not to be giants
    I want to hear him talk again
    About how my words misrepresent my reality
    Telling me of his visions… the things he sees
    Sometimes men have something to impart to women
    The things they are forgetting to say

    Patrice C. Queen
     
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    Well my Queen this was a piece that I truly enjoyed flo on my sista!
     
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    o' my i love this flow sista u open a space so dear
    keep flowing
     
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    It seems sometimes we have a connection to people that on the surface we don't understand. I found this to be quite intriguing. I would enjoy reading another piece, should they ever meet again. Much enjoyed poetess.
     
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    Thank You

    Peace

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    I have ridddenthe subway again a few times and I have not seen him again yet


    welllllllllllllllll

    Peace

    Patrice
     
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    Thank you for taking the time to read
    and your response is appreciated


    Peace

    Patrice
     
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    We have not met again .... yet I keep looking


    Peace

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    Hi PatriceCQueen
    This is a great flow
    And it’s a common nature (flirtation)
    It is a beautiful gift that we all have
    But rarely use and that is to listen.
    And feel with our mind. I loved the tale in
    your poem and the detail
    Observation...its like i was there

    Peace & Love
     
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