Black Poetry : Train Depot

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Bluewater, Jun 17, 2004.

  1. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My name called
    Turned
    You were there
    Still looking like a warrior God
    Its been many summers since
    I’ve seen you.

    The train
    Only minutes away
    Making it just in time
    With a hug
    Not missing a step
    You then said,
    “For old time’s sake”
    Expecting a soft kiss to the lips
    Instead received

    Quick dip
    French kiss
    Tongue suck
    Background sound
    Woof! Woof! Yo! Yo!
    Lifting me
    Slowly
    Cheek to cheek
    You breathing
    In my hair
    Whispering in my ear

    The conductor cried “All abroad”
    The scent of your cologne
    Its
    In my hair
    In my clothes,

    No words exchanged
    Handing me my bags
    Staring into your eyes
    Yeah,
    You caught me by surprise
    Not knowing what to say

    Giving you a subtle wave good-bye
    You walked with the train.
    Lips moving
    Motioning my name

    Sitting now with my eyes closed
    I now travel home wrapped in you
    Not thinking about the kiss,
    But the scent I now travel with
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow !!!
    dat was some train ride
    of his lasting aroma
    divine poetess
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sis wow...
    i likes the train ride
    flow head on....nice very nice
    Angel
     
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    I tell you, I had to read this twice...smiling all the way through it because I was reading it ever so slow to inhale all being said...then I found myself going at the speed of light. I mean, I was bobbing my head and all :laugh: ..I must say, it was very touching and moving, heartfelf and at the same time...had me smiling big time. Oh I really enjoyed reading that, yes I really enjoyed it. Thanks for the big smile it gave me.
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Girl you still got that fire. Its good to have you and your gift back!
     
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    The scene you created here Blue, whoa, I can almost smell that cologne myself...Very sensual write.
     
  7. Bluewater

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    :wave:Brother Rich thank you for the love...dear warrior:)

    :wave:Sister AngelI'm glad you like thank you sister

    :wave:Sister queentswana now you got me smiling sis, so happy tyo make you smile, thank you for the love

    :wave:PropheticNsyght thnak you for the love and the welcome back, it sure for great to let it flow..once again thank you so much

    :wave:Sister watzinaname thank you dear sister so glad it brought you into the vision....thank you for the love


    thank you dear poets for sharing your love on my flow :)
     
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    the scent one leaves behind...
    can definately tell a story....or two ;)
    tight joint sis
    one love
    khasm
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aww yeah, smell is my most powerful sense, girl, and the one that links to memory. This one made me smile.
     
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    This poem cause me to smile again...today.
    thanks again...
     
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