Black Poetry : Tragedy

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  1. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    she was a small town debutante
    with dreams of the big city
    from eye candy to arm trophy
    she was addicted to feeling pretty

    she flirted with disaster
    he knew she couldn't be trusted
    but she was so sexy
    and desperate
    that his appetite for her grew
    destructive

    his poison of choice
    was this volatile temptress
    she agreed to play her part
    so long as he paid her price:
    commitment

    no band-aids at home
    she searched for healing in clubs
    she stopped dancing to follow him
    'cause the pole wasn't big enough
    to cover her wounds

    soon he showered her with money
    making it rain on her pity party
    she paraded in his shadow
    dressed in Ed Hardy

    a diva with designer names
    to cover her frame
    all she wanted was structure
    a family was her fantasy
    but vanity distracts her lover

    his pockets couldn't fund
    the spark missing from her heart
    a star that doesn't twinkle
    can hardly survive the dark
    without getting lost

    she found herself divorced
    he found someone else
    she keeps searching for a father
    with no men to help

    (c) 2008
     
  2. asimplepoet

    asimplepoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Definietly a victim of a tragedy. We are reaping what we have sown into the community. Babygirls growing up with no fathers now looking for their daddy in every tom, dick , and harry. Oh so sad. Excellent description of the situation.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He tried to patch up her heart, but it's a hole that she'll have to mend. I appreciated the poetic detail that went into this write. Well done.
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow....It is Never and WIll NEVER be enough....And if it is not sad, the road that lead to totality.......smh Than nothing can be.
    Flow on Poet.....continue with the truth!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    her heart like a bank once closed it off can't patch up pain & hurt
    great write poet
     
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