Black Poetry : Touched Me Bad

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  1. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    how could you

    I remember you
    You came in that morn...high....kinda drunk
    You gave me a hug told me to go to bed
    Told mama the same.
    You ransacked the fridge
    Only to find nothing there
    Slowly pacing the floor.......you stopped to sit then
    Fell asleep on the leather sofa
    Woke up that evening
    I came to you to remind you of my birthday
    Remember me sitting in your lap??
    I loved you so much, Daddy...
    I loved the thought of being your good big ten year old
    Daddy's little girl.
    You gave me ten dollars and told we to run along.
    I did.

    I remember you
    You came into my room with a watch
    Shook me softly out of my sleep and kissed my forehead
    Happy birthday you said it was midnight
    You told me what a fine woman I have grown to be
    (Who me??)
    You open my blouse and kissed my under developed breast
    I didn't want to tell you it made me tingle uncomfortably
    But you are after all my Daddy.
    This is a new way to kiss people...I had seen this once on TV
    You told me to go back to sleep.
    I did.

    I remember you
    you told me not to cry
    this would hurt for only a moment...then you stabbed me
    Again and again...I tried to bear it but the pain made me yell
    you cupped your hand to my mouth and continued to stab me
    When you left my room I glanced at the watch...3...
    Am I dying now???
    MAMA!!...came into the room, looked down at where you stabbed me ran into her room and screamed....then she went into the bathroom and ran some hot water in the tub. She carried me
    and lay me softly in it without questions.
    Why didn't she ask....
    You touched me bad.

    I remember you
    Distantly. Daddy.
    And I smile at my last memory of you.
    I walked back into the room
    You were stabbing mommy
    I got the 38 out f the drawer......
    history.
    Daddy how could you treat me like a $10 whore?:(
     
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    eternal

    Let me first say :wave: WELCOME :wave: to our home and we invite you to continue to post & to become a family member sharing your wonderful gift of scribing here.

    This piece is soooooo extremely thought provoking...feeling provoking.....etc.

    It sure pulled feelings out of me. How sad this piece is, and unfortunately this type of scenario happens all to frequently, even more than most may be aware of! :(

    Thanks for sharing this work, and I look forward to reading more of your pieces!

    always :heart:

    N2



    :wave: :wave: WELCOME :wave: :wave:
     
  3. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    N2UrSoul

    Thank you for the welcome, I hope all enjoy!!! I used to post here awhile back!!! I am so glad you liked!!:D
     
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    E??


    oh my good-ness!! i rememba the flava of that flow!!

    Eternal... lil sis... is that really You?!!?? it has been
    a very long time!! believe it or not... when i saw your
    name... i just got on the phone with one of the peeps
    from way back in the "good ole" Afronet days... &
    was like... "don't we already know eternal?" (lol)
    you have been missed!! wasn't it music you were
    going off to pursue?? in any event... i'm glad you're
    back!! :):):):)

    Welcome Home Poet!

    AlwaysLove.
    SunShyne~
     
  5. eternal

    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love you...

    You remember me!!! :heart:
    It is me...no not music but just putting my life into a perspective that I could appreciate...
    I won't desert you all again.
    BTW, I heard that all of my old poems may still be in the great SOMEWHERE, where the h--- is that??? I missed you all so much...
    I told you I had to go to AA (afronet anonymous):love:
     
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    ****! ****! ****!

    THIS PIECE IS REAL CAUSE I CAN FEEL THE SOUL IN THIS POEM.
    LOVE THIS POET.:heart:
     
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    THIS IS DEEP!

    This here was real good poet. I'm close to being depressed right now...
     
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    :love: Thank you for the love on this one....I hope to touch everyone with a little somethin' before I am forced to retreat!!

    Love is...
    Eternal
     
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    eternal Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Boo, don't be depressed...It's all love here...
    Hug :heart: :love:
    I don't want to make anyone cry, just want to put something in here for a moment.
    Just a thought...
    Love is...
    Eternal
     
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    drowning...
    in...
    the...
    depth...
    of...
    the...
    pain...

    true scripting here...heartstings pulled...

    welcome back poet...
     
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