Black Poetry : " Total Recall "

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  1. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ... a poem entitled " Total Recall "
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    Total Recall




    Writing this poem in the dark

    listening to my memories sing to my future.

    Realizing all i've lost
    midnight skies killed by dawn and all.


    I want to make music.



    I want to make love.



    I want to make babies.


    I want to make peace.


    Cuz I love music, I love God , I love babies and war is too expensive.


    - cant forget how her hair smelled
    - cant forget how her tongue tasted
    - cant remember exactly who to blame

    Whatever Happened to CRAZY !?!?????

    I went up to Lake Erie yesterday to look for...

    My Music that won't play.

    My Love that won't make.

    my big dining room table, my moosehead fireplace.

    Sensory Deprivation -

    Thinking " hmm, maybe Death Starves Hunger "
    - but it doesn't.

    Insatiable is the word.

    Until music makes the baby dance.

    Until a piece of love extends the reach of love.

    Until it comes as close as the water to the beach of it all.


    Bluest water reflected in sky i'm watching
    cry i'm watching
    tears spill back into waters
    - into skies

    - can't rememeber who said it first

    - can't remember why it rained

    - can't forget why I'm here.

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    Hello all ---

    I guess you could say I cracked under the pressure - LOL !!!

    So many of you writing such GREAT , GREAT ish -
    I mean crazily tight poetry ---


    ( my fave's haven't changed ;o)

    But i couldn't read EVERYTHING,
    or even as much as I wanted to.

    and I usually only felt like I deserved to post and
    have my stuff visited if I had visited everyone else's latest posts.
    ( Obsessed w/ being fair ------------ straight pisces affliction -LOL )


    but I'm back ( kinda ) -- so please get at me yo !


    P.S.

    I'm still single , so if anyone knows
    how I can meet Alicia Keys, lemme know - :eek:) !!!
     
  2. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hyp, dear poet, i'm loving this piece, too! it's really good to see you back, even if it's for a short time. also, i'm loving the flow of this piece and your word usage, as well...it's very nice. alicia keys, ehhh??? her music is tight.

    ~~~inkdrops~~~
     
  3. N2urSoul

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    Where in creation ...

    Have you been?! You had me concerned ~ I haden't seen your name on the boards for quite some time and for a little while there I was having "Scribe Withdrawl" ~ :lol: from not being able to read some of your SUPERFANTASTICALLY CHARGED PIECES!
    Don't stay away so long next time!

    Ok...now, about this piece --

    All I wanna say is that it is :hot: :hot: :hot:
    Brotha Hyp, you know I be lovin' da way you put it down (but you already know ~

    Imma fan 4 life!

    :heart: & missed ya'...

    P.S. Hope you plan on stayin' around for a while?
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    JUST SIMPLY

    BEAUTIFUL.........U GOTTA STAY HOME AND PLAY MORE OFTEN
    YA BEEN MISSED.......GLAD YA BACK HOME..:heart: :heart: :heart:
     
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    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thinking

    I'm still thinking--Amun-Ra

    :cool:


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    HYP

    i see you have not lost the touch son

    keep the flow

    where you been man?
     
  7. Hypnotize

    Hypnotize Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yooo

    Thanks for missin me ya'll -

    the feeling is very Mutual !!!

    believe that ( fo' shizzle ) --- ( Whoa - i think my kids at work
    are rubbing off on me - lol !! )


    really doe - ,

    I honestly only felt worthy to post here
    if I had read enough of ya'll's poetry to make it seem equal.

    It's my own self torment I guess -
    I told myself " Since they give such great accolades,
    I will return the favor by reading EACH AND EVERY ONE
    of their pieces "

    kinda like - If I posted 3 in a week ---
    I would NOT post again until I took 2 weeks to give back and
    enjoy other's work.

    and I honestly Love reading everyone's work -
    but it all just kept coming so quickly - I just
    had to take a break.

    It's kinda like a sensory overload I guess.


    But I hope to find a pleasurable medium once again here-
    and i thank you ALL for checkin me out.
     
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    yes

    u will find peace in da valley
    u will see love in da house
    and ya mind will be at rest again
    flow on! do ya do baby!!:D :heart: :kiss:
     
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    Hyp,

    my lil' brother! I was wondering where ya been! well written piece...I thought you went to Australia and got lost chasing Kangaroos :D

    on the real it's good to see ya' back


    blak
    verb
     
  10. Amun-Ra

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    Sharing!

    You showed yourself in this one--it takes courage to reveal what we think and feel--well done--Amun-Ra

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