Black Poetry : Total Eclipse Of The Sun

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by alyce, Jun 11, 2002.

  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    June 10, 2002 ~ a day to remember ~

    I felt a change before I saw the shadows
    bend into an eerie slant across the pavement
    I couldn't hear the birds anymore
    I wasn't even aware they'd stopped singing since morning

    The colors of my day ran together;
    spotted and mottled like classic monet
    and I shielded my eyes against the faceless glare
    nothing was the same, not even the sound of my
    own heels ... strange and hollow
    with a 3 second delay after I touched down

    The trees leaned away as if blown by the wind
    but the absence of air caused me to gasp and wheeze
    all motion wound down as I struggled
    to move in an impossible direction
    against an unyielding force

    The only sound were the sirens blasting in my head
    so loud I could feel my pulse beating in my temples
    as the beads of sweat formed upon my brow
    I was unable to cry out; my tongue was too heavy
    & my lips refused to part

    With the only strength I could find in my body,
    I straightened my back, in defiance of the evil which
    threatened to push me down
    lifted my face toward the smoldering sky

    and looked the sun dead in the eye

    Alyce (c) 2002
     
  2. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    queen

    this is poetry personified...thank you for your blessing

    blak
     
  3. Bishop

    Bishop Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sweet A, this is a powerful piece here.....I love the imagery you brought out in this one.
     
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    i'm like :eek:

    *speechless* :lol:

    this brought chills

    excellent flow alyce

    suspense upon suspense :)

    pd
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Alyce dis was so tyght gurl i sit and watch lastnight
    the magical bliss of the sky wit naked eye
    lovin how u displayed this master piece.......beam on gurl!!
     
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    Enjoyed this piece

    Very soothing
    Feelin it
    Desert Storm
     
  7. Natasha

    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :eek: see that right there is what always does it for me.....Your strength just comes bursting through your words, grabs me and says here ! here is what a powerful woman is ...Girl I love this:toast:
    Natasha
     
  8. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Poets. This one is special.

    :heart:

    a
     
  9. MsBerry_98

    MsBerry_98 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Now this is what poetry is all about. I'm in awe. You've done something with this one that takes me breath away. {i'm gasping as i type}

    Much :heart:
     
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    **** it.

    you are amazin', awesome, the queen of poetry.

    whoa,
    jh.
     
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